You hurt me with words
Yet you hurt me without
I'm never out of love...
But I'm always in doubt
Can't you make me feel
As though I am secure?
Like a blanket to a child
Or a box to the homeless?
All I ask for is some security
A place for me in your heart
That will be my home,my safe
My vault where nothing can
Touch me or hurt me again
Unless you don't love me...
At least until you decide;
To throw me out and leave me
Let me stay,in pumping veins
In your bleeding heart, breath
Let me be the essence of lungs
The air you need to breathe!
I know I can be all that you need.
A contest entry
- I Need You. by Poetryintheblood.
550 points, ended January 24, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What's your first impresion?
Comments
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Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Thanks!
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i appreciate your sentiments and your feelings are clear but this is too cliche for what i'm looking for. feel free to revise if you want and i would re read it. you might play around with different styles and forms and try to think of some unique imagery for what you are trying to express.
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it's okay, I like it like it is...so I'll just remove it. Thanks for your time and reading it.
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okay. thanks for the effort. good luck in other contests!
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So sweet, touching, heartfelt and very loving!!! one of your most emotional here, it's love!!!
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Thanks Antonio. Appreciate it as always.
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