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my eyes are open



the cotton is high
and the children place their toys
softly
between white and August green



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  • landmark
    January 22, 2009

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    this is beautiful... i love the color imagery congrats on silver!


  • Twins 4 me
    January 22, 2009
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    Very well written piece. Says so much in few words. Well done!


  • Maxboy gold member
    January 22, 2009

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    Very nice write with wonderful metaphor.

    Best wishes in the contest