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Hidden

I was bound

Gagged

Stuffed in a corner

Hidden.


Forgotten

As dust formed in layers

over me,

and webs

encased me,

folding over my mouth

until I couldn't speak.


I was hidden

and forgotten...

and hidden.

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...again... I don't know.

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  • Lies4Truth
    June 27

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    Really good I know how the narrator feels my favorite part was Dust formed in layers over me. Great job


  • HereComesTheSun
    February 13

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    as i look at the contest this is for and i read this piece i feel that you understand loneliness but gave it in a new perspective and really gave emotion great work


  • liduen silver member
    January 21

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    Phe was hidden! Until I came and spazzed enough to wake you up.

    Anyhoosiles, nice poem! I agree with KT that it should be a little bit longer. I love it though! YAY! Yeah, I'm brain dead. I blame french.

    The background is cool by the way.

    • checkmate-
      January 21

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      Spazzy liduen.

      I'm braindead too. That's why it's short

      I like the background too! I wrote the poem, then was looking through backgrounds and found this, and thought it was perfect! It was like DESTINY!

      -Paradox


  • StarIlluminated
    January 21

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    This was good. I think it could be longer, because it seemed as though JUST when I got into the whole imagery and setting and I understood what was going on part, it ended. That was a sad moment .

    But it's still quite good.

    *KT*

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