Eyeliner thickly paved
round’ her dark sullen eyes,
jet hair framed pale face;
must be goin’ nowhere,
so they believe not in her,
but in her sinister colors.
Yet she flourishes in school
beside the “colored” boy;
an implant from the ghetto,
destined to fail, or so they believe,
the American Dream gone bad
in all their pompous prejudice.
Together they hold hands and unite,
to promote “Stop the Killing”,
while crowds of all colors gather;
a black balloon floats for every child lost,
black guns of every kind surrendered
to awaiting police.
These two know bigotry and hate.
Beatings and deaths over black;
from those blind to the sub-surface
or too afraid to admit connections.
Perhaps our two embrace their diversities,
knowing color is only color wherever it be.
Author notes
"Hatred"
A contest entry
- FED UP WITH DISCRIMINATION!!! by LovelyLauren.
37500 points, ended March 17, 65 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks for your opinion. I agree!
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Powerful from beginning to end.
The Positives:
very beautiful and fasinating you really nailed it
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Yet she flourishes in school
beside the “colored” boy;
an implant from the ghetto,
destined to fail, or so they believe,
the American Dream gone bad
in all their pompous prejudice.
this part was just amazing I am speechless
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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Wow, this was powerful. Thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest
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Beautifully stated
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I love the way you have used color throughout for different purposes. I have read your Author Page and admire you greatly
KW~
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"Yet she flourishes in school
beside the “colored” boy;
an implant from the ghetto,
destined to fail, or so they believe,
the American Dream gone bad
in all their pompous prejudice."
These are brilliant words. The kind of discrimination you write about is still such a huge problem, and it needs to be addressed.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Lauren
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job well done mom
this is amazing, but kinda depressing :S
love you xx -
Wow. Can't tell you how uplifting this was to me. I really have been discriminated against for the way I dress, etc.. This is one of the best poems about stereotypes I've ever read. It was so original the way you approached it.
Thanks for writing. And best of luck in the contest.
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