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Burn

My screams drown in fire

I chant auspices,
flesh melts from bone
the avatar has come austere,
death, immortal hands.

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  • Salty Hibiscus
    January 21, 2009

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    vivid imagery here. wow. i definitely would scream along with you - burning myself to death. i have been burned several times before. i felt your poem. well done. thanks for sharing and good luck.


  • suseann
    January 21, 2009

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    Ouch! I'm reading a souls reckoning with the blast furnace of trail by fire in immortal realms here.