why did you have to go
this sadness i felt youll never know
tears streaming down my cheeks
my eyes like fossits with leaks
darkness storming my inside
wish you were still here my side
such a perminate way out
no matter how much i shout
no matter how much i cry
theres nothing i can do about the day you made yourself die
knowing you were hanging from a belt in the top of your closet
i think thats the first moment that i truley lost it
in memory of ♥brandon daughtrey♥
A contest entry
- Just A Memory. by BadBlood.
1200 points, ended February 2, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
who did you loose in your life by suicide?
Comments
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Thanks for entering my contest. I like your concept here but you can still improve your composition. The length of the last three lines seemed to have disrupted the rhythm of the entire piece and there were several spelling errors throughout the poem. Besides that, the rhyme scheme you used fit in every line nicely. Edit some portions and you're good.
Good luck.
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