metal box and tray
colored pencils and paper
cheeks flushed in fever
comforter awash
with crayons and clementines
child in her sick bed
A contest entry
- True Haiku by Odd Thomas.
650 points, ended February 8, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Oranges and/or Lemons by Vera Rich.
590 points, ended January 30, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I have been here before - before I entered the oranges/lemons contest - but I thought I would visit again as I tracked down the list of entries. Once again I am struck by the vividness of the scene.
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As you may know, I am not a great enthusiast of ultra-brief poems; they have to be VERY well done to make an impact on me. But this little sketch IS exceptionally well done. And I relish the pun of the "clementines". Thank you.
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I had been thinking about the oranges and lemons contest too, but you have pipped (aha!) me again
This is an interesting doubled haiku, but I see it most of all as a painted scene, very vivid.
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