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Old Flame

Burning desire goes
through me when
seeing his face

That hair, those
beautiful blue eyes
shining with intelligence

I've known him
since I was
eight years old

He was once
one of my
very best friends

As we grew
older, we went
our separate ways

Everyday I see
him my heartbeat
will always quicken

To this day
I still love
him to death

Through the hurt
and everything else
sadly he changed

Mean and cold
defines him perfectly;
he won't change

All that I
ask of you
is one thing

Take care of
yourself my friend;
love you always

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  • rainbows.
    July 7, 2009

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    This is a very pretty poem and very sad also. There is a lot of emotion in this; and I love that. More imagery and metaphor could have been used; but this is a very good poem by itself. Thank-you very much for entering this into my contest.


  • okadadokie
    July 7, 2009
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    Wow nice crush but kind of sad

    ~Oka


  • poet360
    March 3, 2009
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    nice write! good luck in my contest =)


  • Xxnightmare21xx
    February 21, 2009

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    Hey again, lol
    i really like this poem. its short and just the way i like it lol. Welcome to the finalists.

    Your Judge

    kaycee


  • tears.of.silence gold member
    February 9, 2009

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    very good

    i really liked this poem and can also relate i have a good friend that turned out to be a druggy and i have no clue where he is at i just hope he's ok now adays. thanks for sharing and entering the contest.. best of luck to you


  • Xxnightmare21xx
    February 9, 2009
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    wow, angel, this was a really meaningful poem. great emotion. i hope that you win one of our contests. good luck. keep writing.

    kaycee


  • Li snuffles
    February 8, 2009

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    Gorgeous...! a mere child a eight, then he changed..sad words but beauitfully penned with a very thoughtful emotion the twhole way through. as though you were thinking back

    thank you so much for entering and good luck...xxx


  • redhanded
    February 6, 2009

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    very nice take on the prompt and thanks for your entry best of luck to you in this contest and in the future
    andi
    (redhanded)


  • Heartbreaker Eyes
    January 25, 2009

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    Yes, this was sad. I liked the ending alot. Good luck in my contest.
    {Degenerate♥} Sarah.♥


  • August Starlight gold member
    January 25, 2009
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    Aww... this is so sad. Different, too. Thanks for entering my contest.


  • Ryan79
    January 21, 2009

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    I like the poem. It really describes how you feel about the changes that happened. It's sad, but you wrote it well.

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