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look at that face
dispicable... ugly...
oh how i hate that girl
yet i'm forced to spend
every day with her
cuz no one knows
of my hatred
ungrateful... selfish...
ruining everything
she dares to touch
i stare murderously
my eyes filled with hate
and there she stands
giving me the same look
from her place
within the mirror

i'm planing on revising this one but what do you think?

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  • ReAdInG.iS.sExY
    January 21
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    very good.deep.raw.
    with that twist of originality to it.


    addie