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Pieces

Missing image
Where to start, where to start
I'm so confused
What to do... have not a clue
Gathering the pieces
dusting them clean
This is the biggest mess
I've ever seen

Gluing them back... where does this go
That can't be right
it looks like a Picasso
All the pieces aren't here
my hearts missing I fear

Can I replace that red thing
with lots of money
and bling
Just might work, I'll give it a try
that heart was an onion
so that's why I cried

I know where to start, I know where to start
Finally figured it out
now know what to do
The pieces fit perfectly
if I just leave out you

Author notes

Pic. Hold Yourself Together by genni

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  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    May 4

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    This was a well written poem. I felt each line. It took me to the first "love" I had. I was 14 and still a kid. Thank you for sharing this was good.


    • darlintlc silver member
      May 7
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      Thanks much I was listening to all the troubles that young people around me was having with their "love life" and this piece came out! It does remind us how hard it was to get over a broken heart when you are young...boy, I'm glad that's over with! I wouldn't go back to being a teenager for all the money in the world! Maybe going back to my thirties would be o.k. LOL!!!

  • MxA
    April 26

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    A unique piece you constructed. It reminds me of doing a puzzle.. lol. So hard sometimes. Thanks for sharing.

    MxA


    • darlintlc silver member
      May 7
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      Thanks much! Putting your heart and life back together is like doing a puzzle


  • Valerien Raven
    March 5

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    A very nice piece of work here .

    Loved it muchly .


  • donnz
    February 15

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    affirmed

    well said
    Too often WE think only another can make us complete
    WE have to BE / before we can relate.


    • darlintlc silver member
      February 17
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      So true..."WE have to BE / before we can relate."

      Thanks much for the read and comment!


  • jackreed3 gold member
    February 15
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    Perfect.... A.B. A.B. I like your style....
    Your friend in poetry....


    • darlintlc silver member
      February 17
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      Glad someone likes my style thanks for the read and comment!


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    January 25

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    hey this is really really excellent, such a clever take on the pic, and your very unique style made it really special, just so very creative, nice write
    thanks

  • Jailyn
    January 23

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    oh wow, this is amazing! i will admit i thought it was GOOD all the way through, but then that last stanza really bumped it up to AMAZING lol. love the pic that goes with it, and congrats on the trophy, very much deserved!
    thanks for sharing, and for your comments on my poetry! much appreciated xo


  • faderman1959
    January 21

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    Great take on the pic! You captured the feelings and emotions perfectly I think! When things fall apart it feels like parts are missing. Well done and congrats on the trophy. Well deserved!


    • darlintlc silver member
      January 21
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      Thanks much! It's been awhile since I posted a poem... so I'm glad ur still reading them. It means alot!!


  • Xxnightmare21xx
    January 20

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    i really liked your poem. i liked how you related that buying things doesn't really help the empty feeling go away. thanks for entering. and welcome to the finalists.

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