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[The][Yellow][Brick][Road]
This world seems to be a magical place
with witches and wizards galore,
palaces built all in emerald,
and endless things to explore.
But all I want,
all I need,
all I hope and wish for...
There's no place like home.
A scarecrow's life is a hard one
stuck up on a pole, my bane.
All the time in the world to contemplate
and I'm stuck here with no brain.
All I want,
all I need,
all I hope and wish for...
If I only had a brain.
Stuck in a body of tin,
frozen because of the rain
standing still for years on end
and I can't even feel the pain.
All I want,
all I need,
all I hope and wish for...
If I only had a heart.
Lions are kind of the jungle
a reputation we work to keep
but it's rather hard to do that
when everything makes me weep.
All I want
all I need,
all I hope and wish for...
If I only had some courage.
We are only four lost souls
who need to find a way
we journey down the Yellow Brick Road
to meet the Wizard today.
And someday we will get:
Home!
Brain!
Heart!
Courage!
Author notes
69. Wizard of Oz
A contest entry
- 100+ options part 2. by redhanded.
700 points, ended January 23, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This just doesn't feel quite right to me. How can I make it better?
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nice! i loved it!!!!!! i love the wizard of oz! this was a great poem! fantabulous job! twas amazingggg... it was cute. =)
loved it!!!!!! =D
-adria <3
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This is soo cute
I like it!
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very nice write loved it thanks so much for your entry and best of luck
andi
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Ohhhh!!!
Now that was mean...Wizard of Oz is maybe my 2nd favorite movie...only to Alice in Wonderland...but by writing this I automatically like it, lol. That's just how it works, lol. But honestly looking at the writing...I love how you go through all the characters, so exceptionally beautifully, almost even like Dorothy herself singing "Somewhere Over the Rainbow". It was very beautiful, maybe even my favorite by you. Great Work.
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You've really captured the essence of the book in this poem!
Interesting use of brackets as "bricks" in the first stanza!
I would use a colon after the first line of the last stanza, and follow it with just the nouns on the next four lines, capitalized, like this:
Home
Brain
Heart
Courage
Maybe put an exclamation point after each one.
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Ohh, those are great ideas! Thanks for your comment!
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