Fatal Fantasy
He came to me one night, picked me out of the crowd.
His eyes, a mesmerizingly minty glowing green,
Black hair, white smooth flawless skin…
He got my attention, stalked me, but I did not care.
I could see, I had become an obsession!
I could feel the nervousness rise in me,
Every time I saw him;
My whole body shook with fear and curiosity.
Soon, his face started to haunt me;
Day and night, awake and in my dreams!
I was sitting watching television the other day,
The lights dimmed, an apparition appeared,
Or so it seemed…
It was HIM!
Handsome, enticing, devilish and fearsome!
I cursed and blasphemed; ‘what is this holographic horror?!’
He kissed my lips, like icy air, making me shiver.
“You are mine!” He said.
It was perspicuous now…
This fearful fantasy has become my fatal fantasy!
Author notes
Words I have to use:
Obsession – Nervousness – Perspicuous – Holographic horror – Blaspheme.
A contest entry
- Heating Things Up! Round 2 by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
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Before I even finish the poem I'm going to begin to comment. This grabbed me immediately:
[a mesmerizingly minty glowing green,
Black hair, white smooth flawless skin…]
That sounds hot! In a weird way, but hot!
[I cursed and blasphemed; ‘what is this holographic horror?!’]
Hehe, I like that line. It sounds old, something Poe or Lovecraft would say in one of their poems.
This does not sound frightening to me! A very good write, it was so fun to read! I would not mind minty eyed men appearing before me! (Send him my way)
Thanks for entering and best of luck to you! -
wow this poem is really awesome ... it lets the reader have a clear understanding and it puts the reader in this person's position ...
as i read this, i felt as if it was me that was being stalked and having those feelings ... the words that you used are extremely effective and makes the poem as greatly written as it is
keep writing
xo -
Beautiful write!
this was a stunning write full of imager! I really liked this piece so much! Thanks again for the brilliant share!
Best wishes!
*~\*~*Heroesrox*~\*~*
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I wish you the very best of luck with this, you have made a superb write from your prompts. It "feels" real, well done.
Sheila
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I love this. This shows all the emotions from start to finish of feelings of a person that has become an obsession of someone else. This write means alot to me, as this has happened to me. Not that way but very very close. I love this write. thank you for penning it and all the luck in the world for this write!
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Wow!!! This was an amazing write, I liked where and how you used the words bank. The ending was just very well written. Best of luck in the contest.
Much love
~Noor
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You Authoress, have preformed a phenomenal work here in adherence to the word bank and title requirements.Bar none!
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Wow this is pretty creepy. I feel like you could increase the fearful atmosphere of this poem by adding more descriptions and some poetic devices. Right now, it reads more like a story than a poem.
Just my opinion, though. Still pretty scary to read! -
This is very eerie and almost chilling. To be stalked and ultimately killed like this, BRAVO!
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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