Like, totally!
The chant from the anorexic cheerleader, with the crowd of odd shaped girls giggling as they put on layers of sticky like gloss.
So much make - up they look like clowns I find it funny now, ever day I see a circus filled will orange-skied freaks.
Ahh, now they find me funny, the pail girl who is most defiantly under wait. Just like them.
Yet my skin is not orange and on my lips is just a smear of red lipstick.
now under there layers of pink caked on make up a terrible truth underlay’s, a web of lies and gossip that rules are ever most tormented school.
Now I see they think of me as a cruel sick game, something to toy and play with. The orange-skinned clowns play the same sick games repeatedly.
Now it must be my fault, I should have new better than to trust in the clowned army. The sticky pink lip-gloss is on his cheek.
The clowns have mad there mark, were mine once was...he no longer cares for smears of red and skin so pail. Now he wants a cheap thrill, willing to do more than I ever will.
My morals stand high, my ground firm. I will not play the game I will not let them win.
However, I know that it may hurt for a day or two. I will all way be able to say I went to school will the clowns.
A contest entry
- Slipping through my lips like honey by Gingersoul.
700 points, ended January 22, 9 entries
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well i was rather mad wen i was written this
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F**king awesome!
It is just the truth about these stupid fake girls (emos and goths and punks are way better). I mean like a majority of emos, goths and all don't bother to gossip and bitch cause we are better then that!
and if that boy keeps on pressuring for you to do obscene stuff wif him, even if u don't want to than you should tell him to f**k off!
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This was good, i've had to put up with these girls my whole life, so I really enjoyed reading that other peoples see through their fake, plastic lives. There is some spelling you need to fix, and some spacing but other than that this was really good. I'm excited to see the rivised version, good job.
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WOW
this is an awesome poem and i totally agree wiv it lol lyl comment on my new ones plz lyl xxx
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good poem ^-^ just a few typos to fix really
other then that i really liked it...I've seen girls like this before...girls can be alot meaner then guys. Im a guy so i never really experienced their evil first hand. not all guys are like the guy in this one though ^-^ we dont all just want a cheap thrill -
Well, aside from the numerous spelling errors [like/lip, pail/pale, new/known etc], sketchy grammar [no punctuation, comma splices, missing verbs] and lack of consonnance, assonance and alliteration, it was a nice piece. Was the make-up theme because of my suggestion to use the consonnance, assonance and alliteration like tasteful make-up? [If not, I apoloigise for my vanity]
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hi harry
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