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I’m Not Afraid........ (It's a Poetic Drama)

I’m Not Afraid

Ey! What are you doing here?
Hidden! Wounded!
Broken and bleed!
What happened?
Why so disastrous?
……………
……………
……………
Speak!
Tell something!
I can help you…
But,
Tell!
Share you heart
Who were they?
Why they did it?

Maa!
They were ….
They were so cruel
They beaten my brother,
Then me,

But why?

I don’t know
But,
I did nothing
They just came
Broke everything
Played with innocence
There!!!
……
Everyone is injured
Some may have died

What they were talking?

I don’t know
Maa!
Ohh! My mummy!
Where is she?
She was with me
She held my hand
Maa!
Where are you?

She is not here
May be left behind
Or injured

Aah!
Mummy!
We did nothing
My mummy and all others
They were innocent
Murderers were shouting

Shouting for what?

For revenge
Of their leader
……..

Just for one person?
They destroyed a whole city?
Many injured and many died
What they did?
They were not the guilty ones
Was it their revenge?
Naa!
It wasn’t
They were the murderers of Humanity
It was nothing more
But madness of blood traitors

When they will stop it, Sir?

May be,
When thirst for blood,
Thirst for money
And thirst for power will end

But no such thirst can be fulfilled
After every few days
They will repeat it
………………………
………………………
No way to stop them?
Can not a wonder happen?
When they will know?
They value of life?
They value of innocence?
They value of blood?
…………..
…………………

Don’t they know?
How a drop become a baby?
Then a son or a daughter
How mother bears the pain?
How a baby born?
Every second before a baby born
She cares and she tries not to take stress
Then the moment
When she comes in the world
How happy the parents are!
Every step of growth
Under the series of cures and take cares
They become the breath of them
…………………
And,
What!
If they see them
Not calling Mama or Papa
Alas!
So terrible, when a mother
Mourn her baby’s death




Pain and so much pain!
Why don’t they get any pain?
Why don’t they feel it?

Won’t they die?
Won’t they taste the pain of Death?

The Greatest of all pains!!!

03/03/2008 ( finished in university’s library )
By A Ghani Shahzaib
The poet of hearts and beautiful words
The one who lives in hearts
Friend for friends

Author notes

I was thinking to publish it after 6 months or so. but I posted it anyway. only and only for this Contest.
The Traitors are Killing My Muslim Brothers, My Muslim Sisters, My Mothers, My Uncles, My Older and My Youngers.

Wallah, if it is so,


Then I'm also Hamas.

Naa Ray Takbeer! Allah Ho Akbar!
Naa Ray Risalat! Ya Rasoolallah
Naa Ray Haideri! Ya Ali
Naa Ray Ghousia! Ya Ghous Al Madad

...

If The Killing of Muslims is War against Terrorism, Do Fight with me Please. I too Wanna Die in the Same Way as My Brothers, and Sisters are Dieing.

My 6th Poetic Drama.
By
The Poet Of Hearts And Beautiful Words

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  • amnouup
    November 8

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    wonderful message

    I liked the message of this write, its very touching, a little improvement in grammar needed otherwise EXCELLENT!!!
    regards,
    Mou


  • Minam
    August 31

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    woow this was great poem...speechless...may the killings of all these muslimsbe justified on the day of judgement....until then, i donno. butthis was a great poem


  • Miss Macabre silver member
    July 4
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    This was intense. There are things I would change, but I'd rather not go into them. You did a wonderful job expressing sorrow and a kind of frantic tone. This poem really demanded answers for these atrocities, a good write. Thanks for entering and good luck to you.


  • Blossom Fairy
    July 1

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    A sobering poem that touches the reader on the arm and pulls her into the scene to see what you know happens. I am sad for those who suffer so. A beautiful, revealing poem, good Poet Sir.


  • green mother rose
    June 30

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    when i read this... i got chills up my spine.. and down again.. wow... chilling write.. hhhh

    deep and wonderful

    blessed be

    green mother rose


  • abuyi
    April 13

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    its sad whats happening to Muslims but if u see it Muslims who are causing problems to other Muslims.. rather than non muslims.

    the imagery is good but it dosnt flow well and some sentences are awkward.. you need to read and observe more poems from old poets to understand english poetry.

    its too long!! i get lost from your write. many grammatical mistakes. "What they were talking?"/ what were they talking? ...."How a drop becomeS a baby?" ..

    well you have the emotions and zest of a poet.. just your skill is raw. in time you will get it too

    thanks for sharing it with us
    regards
    abuyi



  • trekkergirl
    March 28

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    hummm... I think I'll just not look at your work anymore if you aren't going to let comments stay... anyway I do remember this one and I didn't like this one at all if I remember right. We had a sort of discussion about it if I do remember correctly.


  • Antebellum
    March 26
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    wonderful.
    great write.

  • Liveloveperforming
    February 10

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    This is a really powerful piece.

    I particularly liked the way you broke from a more structured stanza format and created something different.


  • Nikki Rowles
    February 9

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    Broken and bleed....it would sound better if it was bleeding...typo maybe or what?...
    Speak!
    Tell something!

    Say something or tell me something would sound better

    They beaten my brother should be written they beat


    May be should be Maybe


    They value of life
    they vaule of innocence?
    they value of blood?

    they should be the or delete the ofs

    at the end pain is used alot...sounds a little repetative....

    but the poem it's self is very good but the thing above they make reading it well difficult...thanx 4 sharing anyway...and good luck...

    *Blessed Be*
    Lauren*rose


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 9

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    So filled with sorrow and great dispair. The travesty of war, no matter who is involved. Peace should be among the ppl. I felt the pain and the urgency within your words. Prayer is something we should all do. Thanks for sharing your wonderful piece.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 7

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    This is quite a sad but, well written piece.
    I enjoyed reading it and think you did a great
    job putting it together. Congratulations on
    your trophy and keep up the great work here!
    Thanks a lot for sharing it with us all!




    Jeremy0826


  • lovelesssoul
    February 2
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    wow this poe is soooooo good


  • lyricist
    February 2
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    this is a wonderful written poem. very very emotional.


  • trekkergirl
    January 31
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    I haev already commented on this one.... And it still is a good emotional write.

  • phoenixonfire
    January 29

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    I usually applaud those writes that I truely love!! And this is just too good! I love the prespective of a child here! It brings so much emotion to the write here!! I am an Indian and I have lot of muslim friends! Well..I love them and have nothing against them! I hope all the ppl in the world sympathise and eliminate such ruthless cruelty towards your kind! Intense and deep! I love it!

    Thanks for sharing and good luck!

    ~pri


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    January 29

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    A very powerful piece here. A lot of people over the entire world are being killed for nothing, I don't understand why people can't learn to live with difference, belief wise and character wise. Sigh, a powerful piece here indeed.
    Laura


  • couldbeworse
    January 29

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    Allahu Akbar. Brother, you have penned a brilliant piece. Such sadness and destruction going on right now. senseless killings, for what? I really enjoyed your write. keep penning and spreading the message.

  • mama-drama
    January 28

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    This is sooo true and very heartfelt. I can only imagine what it feels like to be caught up in between.You did a marvellous job and conveyed your feelings very vividly.I'm glad I clicked on it.Good day


  • XXAgedWithDespairXx
    January 28
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    This was amazing!
    It was sad and cool and different.
    Good job.


  • stars-
    January 28

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    by not realising it was about the muslims, i took it as in general and proved to me your point. i dont agree with discrimination anyways but your poem sparked understanding in my mind about what is being done


  • Selithia
    January 28

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    Brilliant!!

    I live in war every single day with others...with myself...I think we all do. This really touched me. Its funny how something said by someone half way across the world had such a huge affect on me...I loved how you made reference to the childbirth and the pain of it and the pain of losing the fruit of that labor as well. my little brother was killed in an accident last summer....I can really relate. great job....you have captured anger and sadness at their best! I do not believe in war and i do not agree with the killing of innocent men,women and children. Great write.
    Crazy Girl

  • trekkergirl
    January 28
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    awe so much pain and sorrow in this one. A lot of anger as well. You ask good questions about war. War is evil... not the people who are in the war. Perhaps some day our world leaders will find another way to solve problems other than getting our people to fight one another. I think that would be ever so nice.

    Many people have died on both sides of this world and I grieve with each and every family member of each and every victim. For death is a permanet solution to what may perhaps be only a temporary solution.

    As for the poem itself it is a little rough in places but I think that is only because I think english is not your native language. Other than that it is a very well written poem.

    Peace be with you... I pray the world finds it as well.


  • untouched pages
    January 28

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    .....Oh there is alot of pain, and hurt in this write. War is not something to take lightly. This write hurts me down to the bottom of my heart. I've lost those close to me fighting in the lastest war... Its hard. Thank you for this write!


  • StarEyes
    January 28

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    There is a lot of pain and anguish in this one! Wow!I do not condone war for any reason, it is horrific and awful. So many loose loved ones, and the loss of life is terrible. I really wish more people would stop and think about what effect war has on everyone! Not jus those in the fighting.

    Great job!

    Best of luck in this contest!


  • Chemical Muse
    January 28

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    i enjoyed reading this very much. though in no way shape or form can i relate, when i was reading this, in my head the voices changed around the poem, and i could hear the verses properly, and that is how i felt it.

    after the poem, i particularly liked the ending statement in your author's note:
    If The Killing of Muslims is War against Terrorism, Do Fight with me Please. I too Wanna Die in the Same Way as My Brothers, and Sisters are Dieing.

    i agree. and i would agree even more if you were to say "the killing of innocents". in that case, i'd like to join in with the victims, as well.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    January 28

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    Reaches inside and pulls the tears from the very inner most parts of my heart such pain and suffer from the needless loss of life...man destroying man and for what reason? I am Native American and i to have seen and heard such horrors against an innocent people...my hand rests with you dear one

    • The.poet.of.hearts
      February 20
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      it's not about an innocent people

      there are thousands, AMERICA has taken their families from them, their children, their mothers
      http://allpoetry.com/poem/4972011

      thanks for reading, due to my two tough contest's judgment, i couldn't say you thanks
      but im so happy with you comment
      by
      the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • Amera gold member
    January 27

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    I'm a formal poet so I really can't comment on this free verse style. I can say however that you have penned the feeling of angst and a powerful emotion in this poem Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Princessdove
    January 26

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    Excellent!

    I love how you reflected on the birth of a child! Excellent! Everyone was once a couples baby and the worst pain is to see your child die before you. I think that you captured this concept so well! Great Job! Keep up the good work! Your an inspiration!


  • desiix3
    January 24
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    amazing i love it


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    January 24

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    War is always the worst answer to ANYTHING. I do not condone war against ANYONE! This is a very honest write...thank you for your entry.


  • No More Lies
    January 23

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    Beautifuly written. It made me feel as if my very soul wanted to cry. This is a great piece of work. Full of emotion. Well done.

    • The.poet.of.hearts
      February 20
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      AWW, YES, there are many, they can't even clean the cheeks :(

      http://allpoetry.com/poem/4972011

      thanks for reading, due to my two tough contest's judgment, i couldn't say you thanks
      but im so happy with you comment
      by
      the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • Mad4life
    January 22
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    This was an amazing poem and I love it.


  • jake0715 gold member
    January 22

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    its a good piece. but the war isnt about killing muslims, incase you dont know what all goes on over there, we do a lot to try and help your muslim brothers, sisters and what not. the ones that get killed are the ones that are killing my brothers and sisters for trying to help them to live in a better place.


  • PoeticLion
    January 22

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    The Story Of A Hate Crime...

    This was a very painful, but Excellent piece to read! It tells of a new kind of hate crime committed by those who seek to destroy all with no remorse for their actions.

    I Salute You, & I Feel Your Suffering....

    • The.poet.of.hearts
      February 20
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      http://allpoetry.com/poem/4972011

      thanks for reading, due to my two tough contest's judgment, i couldn't say you thanks
      but im so happy with you comment

      THANKS FOR THE SALUTE, AND I DO SALUTE YOU TO UNDERSTAND THE WORDS OF THOSE WHO ARE BURNT ALIVE BY THE SHITS OF ISRAEL
      by
      the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • new born
    January 22

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    This was powerful with an important message. You worded it well and the emotion really came across. Good luck in the contest!


  • pickledcass
    January 22

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    In response...

    It may seem obvious to point out that you seem to be in a lot of...pain? If not pain then distress.
    It makes me upset to read your words and your note there and know that somewhere, away from the relative safety of the western worlds in which many of us live, there are those who have all they love torn from them in an instant and are lost forever.
    I feel for you, I am sorry for your losses and any torment you may yet suffer for those warmongerers and sadists.


  • ArmyBrat17
    January 22
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    wow that's really great nicely written keep it up u can go far with ur poetry


  • keybladekitty gold member
    January 22
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    This touched me.I hate that people are killing other people. Good luck in the contest.


  • honey bear
    January 22

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    it hurts my heart to know that people are killing and maiming each other, so so sad, you have done a good job of expressing the feelings here my friend, good luck in the contest with this sadly all too true write .


  • hyper thing
    January 22
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    nice i loved this

  • theromantic
    January 20
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    ncie piece

    nice peice my friend

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