emotions bellow
from grumbling skies
anger strikes
scaring you and I
belated tears
stream fretfuly down
delaying our walk
into town
Author notes
poop ran outta words for now
A contest entry
- Stream of consciousness by brandy..
550 points, ended February 21, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a good poem, ah i would have just walked in the storm anyway, a bit of rain does no harm really, getting wet can be fun, then once in town, sit ina nice warm pub and get a few brandies down the greggory peck
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excellent~
You described this as if I were there
Such excellent imagery it almost speaks to you
Best of luck in the contest sis
I have up 3 new ones hope you come give them a read
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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excellent~
Enjoyed this read sis
I used to love rain but has rained so much here this spring I am sick of it LOL
Best of luck in the contest
Come see my new one
Hugs
Susan~~~
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I like short poems, and this is a good one!
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cute
its cute and well carved cara ..keep on writing
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Rain Delay
Hi Cara,
Tears of rain or tears of the one who didn't get to go to town?
Dogs or children, its all the same. Delay a promised walk and you get tears; no matter how dangeous the weather.
[No every storm is delaying! My wife sent me out in a tornado once, for icecream while she was pregnant!]
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aw this wonderful I can relate to your words good luck in the contest
maralisa
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Nice one Carla
Best wishes to you
Julie
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Nice story that is flowing here....those words add up so very quickly. You have created a nice visual...with an ending...only to be elaborated on later. Well I do hope so anyways..would love to see where this goes. Best of luck in the contest
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