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Ocean Song

Ocean song-
delicate rhythm,
it entranced her
unexpectedly.

Calling forth all her power,
yet it knocked her into
oblivion.

Cradled in foaming darkness,
crashing, undulating-
yet a light beckons hope...

a calm amongst her storm.

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  • Ziola
    January 19, 2009
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    whoops


  • Ziola
    January 19, 2009

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    this is a very beautiful dark peice, the last line just ends it perfectly with an ahhh. great job, ty for entering


  • Xianaria gold member
    January 19, 2009
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    This is really good ~
    the ending stanza ties it up nicely.

    Best wishes in the contest ~


  • Ademon
    January 19, 2009
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    oh wow...this is beautiful...golden I bet... very great write hun!


  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    January 19, 2009

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    Wow, beautiful words for this picture!
    Great work bringing it to life here.
    Well done and good luck to you!




    Jeremy0826


  • Never.Give.Up
    January 19, 2009

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    Awww... this beautiful and it has such a calming sense to it went you read it.

    A wish you all the best in the contest.

    Rose

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