A love that could never be defined
With words, a love that wasn’t confined
By fear, loss, or distrust.
But the sad truth is the one that must
Still be said; it can’t be left unclear
The pain that nobody hears
Or sees, but the pain that still is
Very real to me. To you?
I know nothing of what you
Have chosen to feel
Have chosen to repeal
Or why you did this.
Words… yes, use them as your dagger.
Use them to kill me and stagger
Away with the pain you refuse to know
Chew me up, spit me out
Eat my insides without a doubt
That you have killed my outside
And my inside just the same
All the while you’ll be screamin’ my name
Because you left me all alone.
When you taste the bitter regret
For backing out and forcing exit
I’ll never look at you again
You’ll only be my friend
Sad to say it, but that’s what
You get for making the cut
Author notes
he fucking hurt me.
In a list
A contest entry
- Abandonment by Sgt. Pepper.
550 points, ended May 17, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What was your first impression?
Comments
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This poem was entertaining and the pain within the words evident. However it is another example where the rhyming seems force, yours in only a couple areas though making it better than many i have read recently.
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WOW, obviously with my contest, i have been reading many poems, but this one truly stood out, thank you very much, i love your flow and as stated i love rhyme,
my favourite line
Words… yes, use them as your dagger.
Use them to kill me and stagger
thank you for entry into my contest
and good luck!
alex
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Great
This was a great piece of work good thorough rhythem. it was good with a nice touch of imagery and not oppressively dark just enough to get the point across
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wow this is nice, reminds me of something i would write, only yours is much better. haha
thanks for entering
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It's sad...but not really teary-sad...it's well written though...good luck!
Alicia Lynn -
cool way to put down this experience, i really liked the end but the beginning of the prose was really good. thank you for entering and good luck
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Interesting.
That is definitely one way to look at things. But cheer up everything will work out as its suppose to. Thanks for entering. Good luck.
Night Mistress 1 -
Love this poem!
I gotta say this is my favorite part in the whole poem.....
When you taste the bitter regret
For backing out and forcing exit
I’ll never look at you again
You’ll only be my friend
Sad to say it, but that’s what
You get for making the cut
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thanks !! <3
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Really strong piece! I really liked it..it flowed really well :] keep up the good work hun!
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thanks! glad you liked it and took the time outta your day to read it.
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wow
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hee; glad you liked it ^__^
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