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Will You Tell Me?

Missing image
I gaze at my reflection
in the mirror of this sparkling pool
To fall in love with him
only makes me a fool
What am I supposed to do
with this feeling inside that is too cruel

I cannot love him
because I fear I do not have a chance
Sure he's looked at me,
even taken a second glance
But that is all,
there has been no other advance

Surrounded by beauty
I know I cannot compare
So stay away
and continue (with my heart) to stare
This cruel feeling inside
just isn't fair.

Will you tell me,
my own reflection,
what am I supposed to do?
Should I tell him of my affection?
Is there any hope
for some kind of deep connection...

Author notes

Prompt: 1

Option: heavy heart

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A contest entry

soo....whats your honest opinion?

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Comments

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  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 10
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    Beautifully written piece. A well deserved win!


  • sophia moonfairy
    February 7
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    Awe this is beautiful and the picture is too I love this


  • sanguigno
    February 3
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    absolutley love it!

    thanks for entering!

  • poets whisper silver member
    January 31

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    I like the poem over all but the rhyme is a little forced which takes away from the flow. What I mean by forced is that sometimes a word is put out of place just to make a rhyme so the speech doesn't sound natural. Thanks for entering.


  • invisible2u
    January 31

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    amazing poem, i love the rhyming, and the subject!!! I can relate, nice write!! thanks for entering my contest GOOD LUCK!!


  • Haygood gold member
    January 30

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    Neat take on the prompt.

    That is a different layout on the stanza (or I just haven't seen it). I talk to myself too...I just don't believe a word I say! I re-read it. They sounds like lines in a play. Good job!

  • sensual
    January 30

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    Aww

    I really like this poem. It has hit a string in my heart and that really says a lot for your poetry. Excellent work and good luck in the current contest that you are in.

  • poets whisper silver member
    January 26
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    really nice presentation. Good job all around thank you for entering


  • Denerica
    January 25

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    I really loved this, talking to your own reflection. The ending was wonderful. Deserving of the awards. Blessings.


  • Sliver Rainshine
    January 21
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    i like this poem. I also like your style.so well done

  • A-muse-in-writer
    January 20

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    Hmmm such emotion here. My advice, should this be a current feeling you have and are drawing on is one of two. If you prefer this guy as a friend than perhaps it is best to with-hold the telling. However... should this person be more of a love interest than friend than the adivce is definately tell him, a no is the worst that can happen. It is better that than never taking the chance which might have been a good path to take. Life is already full of plenty of regrets without letting opportunities go. excellently written sis.


  • Ms Raneika
    January 19

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    Nicely put, I like how you contribute your feelings as you did your poem layout and picture.

    ...Love ...so questionable isn't it?.

    My only honest critical thought would be for your continued writes in the future, put a little bit more deep, detailed emoitons in it.

    Thanks for entering!

    Take Care

    Love, Raneika


  • AbidoodleCullen
    January 19
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    This is wonderful!
    Thanks for entering and good luck!
    <3 Abi

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