Is there a bird like a nightingale?
who sings ancient tales
such an ancient bird singing such an ancient melody
was there a lover in her sweet melancholy
times came and times gone
emperors and clowns equally adorn
in silence of night her odes are born
many mystic fogs cleared and gone
day breaks my thoughts as hypnotized i lay
with such few words how can i display
death came never to this birds song
chaos and pain have seen and prone
never did i felt such a present from mother nature's gown
rum plays its game as the time flies in its frame
i lie to myself am i the one insane
i am in love with a fantasy in its crime
equally am i doing injustice to such a creature so sublime?
lost are its woods in the forest of steel and cement
yet a joy in her songs in a drought content
in mystery she lives deep within the lonely shady branches
when dawn cracks the horizon, her voice lost through these noisy ranches
in question I dozed was there a bird like this nightingale
her songs that requiem in darkness in which nature sail
bewitching it is to a humble mind just uncertain to this life
mighty songs are fed in coded voice
lies and deceives set apart , beats from life sung apart
natures glory over shines any mighty heart
surviving this cruel sphere
nowhere to go and no one to hear
can human like me outlast this bird?
form the pain and glory it lived to be heard.
written by abuyi
Author notes
inspired by the Ode to Nightingale by John Keats
i used several prompts
death, chaos, symmetry and human nature
i chose to rhyme cause i want to check whether my rhyme can change your mind. in rule you didn't clarify not to write in rhyme. good poetry is to be in some form. prose shadows free verse..
good poetry is every where. its how you look for it
My first ever write iraqi boy's tale.. entered in your contest
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2175997
written by A B U Y I
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A contest entry
- Your favourite poem! by forbidden-colour.
550 points, ended July 8, 142 entries
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what you say?
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Thank you for entering!
You are right to be proud of this poem, very indepth and beautiful poetry here, well done!
Thank you for entering!
Take care,
Sophie.
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great
I really enjoyed this read. It was a nice piece of work and I could see exactly the things you were writing about... i lie to myself am i the one insane
I loved that line! Not sure why, but I did! Great job!
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hmmmmmmmmm
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I like this one very much.
I think this is one of your best poems. The rhyme is very good.
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thanks.. meant a lot.. but your rhyming is still amazing. once in a while by fluke i do rhyming and this one is from john keats.. had to be different.
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rhyme was classy with the first stanza.
i don't like the rest for it
i like the poem though.
but the repitition of ancient threw me.
anyway.
thanks for entering.
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An Ode dedicated to John Keats! Interesting, interesting I must say Abuyi! Reminds me of the good ol' poetry we used to read. Keep it up Abuyi
We definitely should meet!
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hehe.. yeah dude, that was some time. reminds me the only good ol'poetry we use to read
yup man.. i heard frm peto that luby is arranging some kind of get together.. inshallah this time i try to be there..
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