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Blue eyes

In all your saddness and despire,
Coated with a cold-hearted shell
It's not so hard to believe prefect
Has so many dark shady sides.
Your words come easy,
And actions so guarded,
Life seems too delicately planned.
The idealisict illousion,
If only our minds where quick enough to catch on.
Every lusty heart, longs for what you have.
No, what you make us believe you have,
But you have nothing,
And a heart is broken everytime.
You commit the pain to quickly,
So we can not label it a crime,
Just an unjustly lie
One not worth spreading,
Only worth hearing, tainting our ears
And all our thoughts wrap themselves around it.
Needing, wanting, hoping
To believe in something you know is just another fairy tale dream.

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  • Devilish Temptation
    March 22
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    Very well written I enjoyed the flow of your piece speaks volumes. Superb


  • couldbeworse
    March 6

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    Every lusty heart, longs for what you have.
    No, what you make us believe you have,
    But you have nothing,
    And a heart is broken everytime.

    wonderful pice. i got alot of emotions from this.


  • the-wake
    February 1

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    I think this is quite beautiful although it only touches on the surface my favorite line is "Every lusty heart, longs for what you have" It is very poetic. I like it. x


  • rinzurajan
    February 1

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    THAT WAS LOVELY...AND SO SO PAINFUL...

    BUT HEY LEME TELL U FAIRY TALES DO COME TRUE SOMETIMES...!!!


    KEEP THE FAITH...

    GOOD LUCK


  • Smiles.Upside.Down.
    February 1

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    wow...

    this poem evoked alot of emotions. despair, hopelessness, pain... are a few that come to mind. very good. i loved it. amazing write!

    KEEP IT UP!!

  • Irisheyes35
    February 1
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    AMAZING POEM...The words spoke to me with such passion.


  • starving4perfection
    January 31

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    omg...okay thats one of my favourites so far! i absolutely loved it...it was great to read!
    "Just an unjustly lie
    One not worthing spreading,
    Only worth hearing, tainting our ears
    And all our thoughts wrap themselves around it.
    Needing, wanting, hoping
    To believe in something you know is just another fairy tale dream."
    AMAZING!! JUST GREAT! thank you for the entry and the best of luck to you!

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