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The fire you bestow

Seeing you in pale light,
Cast off from a distant moon,
Makes my heart and mind go spinning,
Knowing I’ll be with you soon.

Still, my feet won’t seem to function,
Frozen, fearing I would fall,
If I mingled with your aura,
I’d be lost, as one so small.

Before such beauty, and such passion,
As none but you could ever give,
No power in time could ever fashion,
This fire you shed, that I might live.

For just one moment in the tempest,
And the storm of burning heat,
That, which you alone can bring,
That which makes my soul complete.

When I finally can touch you,
And your heat pulls me within,
I am in heaven for those moments,
As no other mortal’s been.

Sleep will come to me, as always,
 I shall dream but never know,
A dream so great as being with you,
And the fires you  bestow.

Author notes

This poem was written for someone who I have often run to when I was in deepest emptiness. Someone who always brought me to the zenith of passionate happiness.

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  • penman gold member
    February 16
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    Excellent

    Wonderful take on the prompt. such a great write. best of luck in the contest.


  • jmk8602
    January 31

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    the fire you bestow-

    A nice write. You decided to you use rhyme, but you made it work, so I applaud you for that. The last line stuck out a little bit, as it detracted from the rhythm of the piece. "And the fires you do bestow," could easily be rewritten as "And the fires you bestow," and it would be saying the same thing.

    Good job, and god luck.


  • Sandygram
    January 23

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    So full of love and passion!!

    This one touches the heart of anyone in love. Your words convey such beautiful feelings of oneness to the reader. Such a delight to read to have the heart stirred. Take care, Hugs to you. Sandy


  • Gwenevere
    January 22
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    Well done on an excellent poem.It really tells of your love for this person, Ros

  • Oh this is just so very beautiful. This sounds like one very special and precious person. Love the flow and rhyme you captured.
    Best wishes in the contest.
    Gaylene

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