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Torn Skin

Missing image
The skin is torn from her once beautiful face
and set aside to wallow in dark disgrace
Once a princess in a fairytale
she has grown old and sold in a soul binding sale
The blood from her body seeps down her neck
for the scars will never heal in retrospect
She has no more feeling in once alive limbs
and the lights in her eyes have now forever dimmed.

Skin torn from a soul who never could survive
when once she lost and alive
Now her corpse rots in an infested grave
because she did not seek to be saved
She had a chance to open the door
but salvation wasn't enough, she wanted more
Now she rots under shallow ground
and skin on her face torn away, never to be found.

Author notes

Option: 2. http://bloodyzone.deviantart.com/art/Dark-Girl-26735115

"break my heart"

Rhyme
"evil angels are the best kind"

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  • skilter
    August 29
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    wow this has great imagery, thank you for entering and goodluck!


  • PinkeyPromise
    July 7

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    great flow,imagery,pic,everything! great dark write luv it!

    ~Divine~


  • Death Reaper ver. 6
    June 17
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    nice flow... imagery is great... good luck to you... this poem is quite good... :-)


  • Miss Macabre silver member
    June 16

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    Now she rots under shallow ground
    and skin on her face torn away, never to be found.

    Vivid! And so so dark. I like this one, good luck to you.


  • lovingpoet
    March 28
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    now that I got some points thaought you would love some and good luck

  • lovingpoet
    March 24
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    I loved this write very much and thank you for sharing in the contest


  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    February 22

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    I loved the imagery you used in this, and the idea of greed eventually killing the piece's subject. The pic is excellent too, though I think the rhyme could use a little work. Thanks for entering!
    -Lena


  • VerminVomit
    February 19

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    awesome pic
    the way you write the poem perfectly describes the image and it gives it a deeper meaning, i like that
    the rhyme makes it flow more, i like that too
    how it ends is also awesome. its all her fault that shes this way (well, i kinda like her more as a... decaying thing than a princess)
    thanks for entering


  • Cyanide Dreams
    February 19

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    Wow. This was one of the darkest poems I've ever read. This was deep and full of imagery. I was scared most of the poem because of the mental picture you put into my mind. Some people always want something more and in the end that becomes there demise. Great job on this and good luck in this contest.

    Josh


  • ToxicSuicide
    February 7

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    Very intriguing. I love poems like this for some reason, dark and sorrow filled. It shows that human-kind isn't always what we like to look like. The idea of this poem may be grotesque (hope I spelled that right, haha) but it's also a weird sense of beauty. It touches on the beauty of dying, or rather, the lack of beauty of dying. Either way, great write. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
    ~ToxicSuicide.

  • the evil angel
    February 4

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    Rhyme? That's not a form... That's simply a style. Can you find a form it falls under? One with specific rules this follows? If not then this is not what I was looking for... I hope you can though because this is a brilliant poem that I adore.


  • Luciferschild
    January 31

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    weird but good, i still think there is room for improvement on this one. thank you for entering my contest and good luck


  • storiesuntold gold member
    January 28

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    Wow what a write here

    Sad it is but often true when one becomes lost and only seeks the life that only brings them pain becomes short lived and life taken before their prim


  • gigglesalot
    January 24

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    this was dark and depressing. I love it haha. great rhyme and you followed directions! ppl here dont do that very much haha. great job


  • redhanded
    January 23

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    wow loved this thanks so much for your entry and best of luck in this contest
    andi
    (redhanded)


  • Ms Raneika
    January 19
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    Nice Dark write ...interesting.

    Love, Raneika

  • A-muse-in-writer
    January 19

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    Wow, that is dark, disturbing, deep. Even a sense of lost hope and despair. Ecellently written sister.


  • Silent Wayfarer
    January 19

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    ooo... NICE! Definitely one of ur darker poems.... very creepy! I LOVE IT! Great job... gives me goosebumps... Great choice for the prompts as well... I was sooo tempted to do this one as well, lol.

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