Sometime she wishes and prays,
Prays to whoever will listen,
That she was never born.
Because the hurts run deep,
Deeper than the bruises that mar.
She walks to school each day,
Grateful to get away from him.
Carrying a lunch she packed,
All on her own,
Wearing her dirty, torn clothes.
Her teacher worries but
She's afraid to ask.
The children don't notice
The girl's shadowed eyes.
Returning home to her father.
The little angel girl runs.
He chases her in a drunken rage.
Fists flying as well as things.
She drops a picture on the stairs
Where she flees. It's a winged angel.
His shouts echo through the empty house.
She cries out and hides
Behind her bookshelf.
She knows he'll find her but
She can't do anything.
Angel girl imagines beauty and love.
When he finds her and
His rage hits home.
His hands beat against his 8 year old.
She's trapped in a world she can't escape.
A world of pain, horror and rape.
Angel girl cries herself to sleep.
In dreams she flies with other angels.
She wishes he'd just kill her,
Take her away.
From all his anger and all of her pain.
Author notes
Partly based on Martina McBride's Concrete Angel.
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angel girl-
A very emotional theme, that has the potential to evoke a powerful response in the reader. However, while this is a good write, I think you could have gone further. Keep in mind, child abuse as a theme in poetry has been done before, and its easy to get trapped in the cliches of the genre (the neglectful teacher, the dirty torn clothes.) Try to go above and beyond and give this piece some more personality, I think with some revision it could be excellent.
With that being said, thank you for entering the contest and thank you for approaching and writing about such a serious and potentially difficult topic. Thank you.
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