All this time I confided in you,
With secrets and stories galore.
But within this conflict that you brew,
My hatred grows for you like never before.
You've torn out my heart,
And left it to rot on the floor.
Then you departed,
Leaving me battered to the core.
For two whole years I wandered,
Lost, hurt, and alone.
While I contemplated and pondered,
As my hatred altogether had grown.
Slowly, you tried to make your way
Back into my arms.
Still, I pushed you away,
Unaffected by your succubus charms.
Eventually, I gave you a second chance,
Though undeserved, I tried.
I could have seen this coming in advance,
But the past I abhorred, I denied.
You put on a fabricated smile,
Tried to be an artificial friend.
While all the time you compiled
Another way to offend.
I fell for your nasty tricks,
Even though I should have known-
By our numerous past conflicts,
I should have left you alone.
Now I just sit and scream,
"How could I let her do this?"
I once thought we were a team,
But you tossed me back into the abyss.
I desire what you took away,
In the past-
On that very day
You left my heart in a cast.
The turmoil that you caused my heart;
Say nothing, I'll ignore the feeling.
As we depart-
It's inside me, squealing.
Let us go our seperate ways.
It will be my well kept secret
That you hurt me all these days-
And in a rotted casket is where I'll keep it.
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Written on January 19th, 2009.
-Sadien-
Author notes
I wrote this mainly for the contest it is in, but I also needed to get it out as well. Note that I do not normally rhyme. If it sounds forced, that's why. Also note that this was a friendship that I am speaking of, and not an actual relationship.
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A contest entry
- YOU RIPPED OUT MY FREAKIN HEART... by AbidoodleCullen.
490 points, ended February 12, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do They Really Care? by HopelessPoet1087.
750 points, ended February 24, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Great write.....
i really like the flow of the poem.
its nicely put.
"Eventually, I gave you a second chance,
Though undeserved, I tried.
I could have seen this coming in advance,
But the past I abhorred, I denied. " this part is really good.
it is funny how one can totally trust a person who hurt us real bad earlier. its like you are torn between "it was" and "it can be" of a relationship (can be friendship can be otherwise...)
beautifully put.
i personally dont feel the rhyming is forced.
infact i wish it would come that easily to me..
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I really enjoyed this poem and relate to it. I know you stated that this was just written about a friendship, but it reminds me of me and my ex. she broke my heart and after telling myself I wouldn't, I let her back in, and in no time at all she repeated her offense.
This is an amazing poem and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck :-)
please keep up the great work!
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Yeah, I guess this could be related to an ex of mine as well. Never thought of it that way...
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This is a good poem. the words bring back the seriousness, even thoug the ryming takes it away, a nice balance
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The rhyming isn't supposed to take the seriousness away. It was required for the contest...
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I would make a joke about falling asleep after the first line, but I'm not that mean
This is really good - then again, you are an outstanding poet 
Very good, the rhyming kept a certain rhythm about it
An it's nice an dark - the way I like it
Well, good luck in the contest
x
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:hugs: THANK YOU! It means a lot coming from another friend to know that this was good. I think I completely suck at rhyming because open form, no rhyme poems are my forte, so to speak...
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this is really good!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
<3 Abi
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Thanks so much! I don't rhyme often, so I admit this was a bit of a challenge for me. But I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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