She places his items in a box;
His pumpkin orange button down shirt
sleeves stained with her tears,
not even the washing machine could remove.
His ACDC sweatshirt black
the mascara melting in with the shirt
his smell, sweet and memorizing
but it fades as did 'they'.
Her nimble hands take down the Twilight poster,
tears slide down her cheek,
her Edward and Bella love has died.
The lotion smell brings memories to her mind;
his hands around her
his lips holding her
him meowing in his kiddish way
she loves...loved him.
Gilmore;
a white bear;
one she clings to when she sleeps,
one she holds as tears slide down her ivory face.
He holds her memories
Gilmore
she will not let go,
becuase letting go,
means forever letting go of him.
just as a child sucks on his thumb
and holds on to daddy's t-shirt
as he packs for a trip
i hang onto
Gilmore
he holds
late night secrets
and twilight scents
Author notes
Krizza gave me the last few stanza's
tank you
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That was really pretty. Wonderful imagery.
I loved the
'he holds
late night secrets
and twilight scents'
Very well done and thank you for the awesome entry. xo -
i love it
its funny how in most of the cases, only inanimate things really know (feel) how much you hurt ... its a beautiful poem.....
"his smell, sweet and memorizing
but it fades as did 'they'." this was great line.....
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love the title
and the fact that it turned out to be a white bear (:
all the tangible things that you mentioned, all the details... superb
Gilmore stanza... also very good
the last four lines
maybe you could move them to authors notes... as it's more of prose, and seems different from the rest of the poem.
or i might do something like...
just as a child sucks on his thumb
and holds on to daddy's t-shirt
as he packs for a trip
i hang onto
Gilmore
he holds
late night secrets
and twilight scents
of you
heyyy your writing's growing with you (: and becoming sunnier ( even though this is such a sad poem, but i'm talking about the telling of the story.)
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wow hun. i know the hurt that you feel here. this poem speaks the pain and heartbreak. beautiful flow of words.
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I know I have been there and done that. The image of what was then, like the ACDC shirt. I saw a typo 6th line from the bottom up...becuase...because. Well written. Blessings.
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