I feel the rain
drop down on
my face. It
-tickles me gently-
making me smile.
But not how
you make me smile.
The ocean roars with the power
of the hurricane
that feeds her anger.
The white mist leaves for land
soaring through the air.
It is a force to be reckoned with.
But its power does
not overwhelm
what you do to me.
The wind bites me,
the rain wets me and...
the cold chills my bones.
But with you hand
in mine – I
feel nothing more
and nothing else.
Only the warmth, of you
of me.
And the warmth
of us...
We walk against
the wind -laugh-
There is happiness
In Your Eyes.
In Your Smile.
There is a happiness
-floating- dangerously
at the edge of my voice.
It lives there now.
It starts to rain again,
the sky turns to grey.
People rush to their homes
to escape the water.
The cold.
The wind, the water
has numbed us.
But in your arms
I can feel...
I can feel the warmth.
Author notes
It's so wonderful to be in love... <3
A contest entry
- Love, anyone? by AbidoodleCullen.
850 points, ended January 23, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love, Nature and Teriffic Titles by Black-Fang.
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Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It's All About Love by grammabuff.
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Comments
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A true picture you paint, love it
Nicely done -
There is a mellowness to this lass,
it simply is very beautiful....
it has a soft and wonderful dignity to it. ....
the title is striking and draws the reader to the poem.
Excellent work.
Your kind comment on my work is valued ten fold knowing what a beautiful soul you have to create such art.
Peace,
Lowell Poe
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Good comparison between storm and love. Suggestion: look at these sentences "The ocean roars
with the power
of the hurricane
that feeds her anger.
The white mist it
leaves for land
soars through the air.
It is a force to be
reckoned with." If you tighten up this image and combine the sentences the flow will be better. Short sentences and short lines can make a poem too choppy. That doesn't mean I don't like this because I do. Buff
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thank you
ill work on that
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Thanks for entering, good luck!
<3 Abi
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