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Beached Black Swan

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relative to music
Is a black swan that stays after dark

there, but unseen,
known, but unknown

a crack in dawn so heavenly music
slips through

a choir vocalizing the “Moonlight Sonata”

and your foot pressed against mine
still sings ginger-haired harmony

to that moment with you
when my back arched
on high notes
and sunk low
into a lullaby
that will hold me

after the final rest
beached in weeds of loss






Author notes

Prompt = 2. "Loss is a relative term." Author (Frank T.)

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  • hotchocolate gold member
    January 29

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    I love what you did here and I enjoyed reading! I like how you used the prompt and thank you for your entry. Good luck to you hon


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    January 21

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    Oh, this is gorgeous. I love the setting and the representation here. What a beautiful event, making the loss the more deep-reaching and the memory the more cherished. Lovely write.


  • Callisto Athena gold member
    January 19

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    Stunning poem, Carol.. I love the lines 'a crack in dawn so heavenly music slips through' and yes, it would be Moonlight Sonata that would be playing.. (One of my most favorite pieces).. Thank you very much, I enjoyed it immensely..