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Essence of Freedom

Missing image
Wishful thinking
To be realized.

Impossible hopes
To be assured.

What never could occur
What never would be shared.

Freedom

It's essence
Consumes our very being.

It's entirety
Fills our hearts.

To be free.
To have won.

Bright possibilities
Have stepped into the light.

New ideals
Have pushed aside the old.

To be alive.
To be whole.
To be free.

Author notes

Option 2 - Write a poem about how it feels to be free.

From the judges I would appreciate a little bit of critique - I know this isn't the best poem I've ever written and would welcome ideas to help it grow.  However, try not to completely drown me in the negatives.

 

Martin Luther King Jr. was such an inspirational man - he opened so many eyes in America to what is truly right and wrong.

 

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  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 5

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    i really like this, its powerful, and has an echo voice in the readers head. i enjoyed this, alot. thanks for entering, and good luck.
    take care, Stephanie ♥


  • JustSimplyLissa gold member
    February 2
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    I agree with Aliceinpoetryland's assesment of your poem. It is a great beginning to a wonderful poem, but it's not as strong as it could be. Imagery brings poems to life.  Although it is straight to the point, and I like that, a little bit more feeling would make this an absolutely wonderful piece.


    Thanks for the entry.

    :f


  • honey bear
    January 31

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    wow this is an exelent imaginitive and creative write that bring a lump to my throat, good luck in the contest with this wonderful dedication


  • VerminVomit
    January 22

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    being free feels good
    and with a bit of freedom the world can change
    the way you state that is amazing, i love it.

    good luck in the contest


  • maralisa silver member
    January 19
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    aw wow a brillant poem good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    January 19
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    This is a wonderfully inspirational piece. It would be stronger , in my humble opinion, if you tried putting in a bit more imagery, so that the reader can really 'feel' the emotions you are espressing here. Maybe try using some metaphors and similes
    Thank you for your entry.
    Gaylene

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