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Filth of the Earth


The blood of the innocent
was never as devine
as the sweet taste of filth,
of the cursed and evil...

Here, taketh mine hand
and journey with me
to a depth you would
never discover alone.

Here in the sewers of the mind
we will release true
and masochism,
into your veins, out of your mouth.

The first victim is always
the most delicious,
then the cravings will come
leaving you helpless and weak.

Lap the cruor into thy
hungered mouth,
let us explore the earth
each alone in our eternity...



Author notes

.:Rules:.

Keep it PG-13 (means no cussing, no adult themed, ext).-
No TyPiNg LiKe ThIs, ItS qUiTe AnNoYiNg.-
No Tpnyig Lkie Tihs, and if you can raed all taht, yay for you.-
Keep the poem between 5 and 20 lines if possible.-
Spell as best you can, but i'm not too picky, less i think you are misspelling things on purpose.-
In the author's comments, post the rules so i know you read them.-
Make sure the font is readable and the background does not make the words harder to read.-
Have fun annd be creative.-
I reserve the right to DQ any poem at any time for and just reason. If I do not tell you a reason and you feel a need to know, feel free to ask and i will tell you.-


Obviously about vampyres, the image was a most peculiar prompt, the darkness and toilet combined lead me to this.

Critique and enjoy...

A contest entry

How Do You Like My Soul? --- Critical Review

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments


  • Darc Raven
    February 2
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    i dunno how it actually connects to the picture, but it was a very good poem. i understand how you could connect the midevil nature of the toilet seat to vampyres... just not the actual picture. lol.

    i always loved dark/vampiric poems and this one is very good.
    good luck and thank you for entering.


  • nobumagawaX
    January 22
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    "wit-wo"

    very good. i love the way you discribe thing..good luck on the contest!!!


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    January 18

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    First off, the title really drew me in. Your language is divine and this poem is probably one of the best I've read in a long time. Even though you're asking for a critical review, and I honestly searched for any advice I could give, I don't think I can help. I think this is awesome.

    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~
    P.S. If this doesn't win that contest, I'll throw a fit, haha!