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Not the Same

When I look in a blue pool of nature
Or ponder over the ocean's curls
I wonder why mirrors aren't the same
When you're looking at little boys and girls

The waters reflect the beauty that surrounds
And you can peer deep inside
But when you look in a mirror all that you see
Is the goodness of heart trying to hide

It shows your freckles, your eyes, your smile
And your hair on which you've spent so much time
But what good does it do if you're wicked inside
If there's no good left to climb

If your heart has no depth and your soul has no flow
Do you see what kind of person you became?
If outer beauty is the only thing that shows
Nature's mirror is Not the Same...

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  • phoenixonfire
    February 6

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    i love the phrases that u use! you are indeed a really gifted poet!! I like the accusation tone in this!! There is a tinge of pain expressed here! I loved it! The background is super annoying!!

    ~pri

  • piccola silver member
    January 28
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    the bubbles are freaking me out but I enjoyed the write immensely. thank you so much for entering


  • lyricist
    January 27
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    round of applause for this piece. beauty is more than skin deep


  • film noir
    January 21

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    Awe, I really like the bubbly background. I only wish that some of them would pop. lol The first stanza is my favorite.


    - Aly


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    January 21

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    OMG I LOVE THE BACKGROUND!!! i usually hate moving backgrounds as i think it really distracts from the poem but i absolutly LOVE bubbles and rainbows ^_^ and what is also odd, is that i saved the picture you used on my comp the other day whilst browsing through google rofl anyway onto the poem! i lvoe the imagery and youre ending is wonderful, brilliant write and may... may i pwease steal the background? I want my desktop on my computer bubbles!
    Laura <3


    • AbidoodleCullen
      January 21
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      bAhAhAhA. sure! I found most of my backgrounds (moving) on Photobucket
      Thanks!

  • zeelocks
    January 20

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    Favorite part: "If your heart has no depth and your soul has no flow
    Do you see what kind of person you became?
    If outer beauty is the only thing that shows
    Nature's mirror is Not the Same..."

    Simply wonderful!


  • couldbeworse
    January 20

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    fav part:
    When I look in a blue pool of nature
    Or ponder over the ocean's curls
    I wonder why mirrors aren't the same
    When you're looking at little boys and girls


  • Sacred Geometry
    January 19

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    oh my frickin god!
    it reminds me of new zealand,
    im sorry if it isnt but i love it
    thanks for entering


  • Angelunawares
    January 19

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    told you id check out your poems, and this was very....deep. Luv the imagery. knew you could do it!!


  • Angelunawares
    January 19
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    really goood!!!!


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    January 19

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    love it!

    love the way you wrote nature, beaches, the last 2 paragraphs had a lot of meaning. I could identify with the last paragraph, I had to deal with someone like this, and still have to sometimes. natures mirror is not the same, beauty is only skin deep.


  • Denerica
    January 19

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    Really a wonderful write,love the thought of development, child to who you need to see how you are , the last lines were profound. Blessings.


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    January 18

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    You're blowing my mind! I can't believe someone so young wrote this, haha. Your take on the picture is unique...most people would have just looked at the surface, haha, and it's ironic now when you read the poem!

    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~


  • stavykm gold member
    January 18
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    Excellent. What a beautiful poem for the picture. I love the childlike take on the picture. I also loved how you really used the reflection of the water as a mirror to one's inner soul and beauty verses one's outer beauty. Beautiful rhyme, rhythm and flow. Just loved it and best wishes in the contest.

    Wishing You Many Blessings,
    Kelle Marie


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 18

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    Aww this is incredibly sweet! Wonderful job! and you have the cutest backgrounds lolz Love it! Good luck girlie!

    ♥ Kathraina

  • Xxpoison.kissesxX silver member
    January 18
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    oh i like this ,very nice write

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