this place tastes like grass
and depth;
to chew and swallow and
be consumed by green
[on the inside]
runs like meadows through thought -
breasts are like two
molehillmounds
searching for spring in a new atmosphere
earthworms tickle the core.
dirt has an invisible hunger
that feeds on the lungs;
petalsouls vault from
underneath
after carefully testing the nostrils,
I gasp
~~~
Author notes
cows eat grass! 
And Hyetal
In a list
A contest entry
- 16 - 20 lines (pif) by Ryno.
500 points, ended January 19, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the catharsis rounds; auditions. by aanika.
1800 points, ended February 10, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
of course that's how you're supposed to feel.
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yes.
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This is my personal comment for the catharsis rounds.
Upon the closing of the contest, I will comment back with a 'yes' or 'no.'
That being said, I liked this, though I felt it wasn't your best, in my opinion.
Putting that aside, your imagery was gorgeous and word choice was near flawless as well.
Thanks for entering, I'll be back.
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I wouldn't say this is your best,
but that aside, it was pretty damn good.
searching for spring in a new atmosphere
I love that.
thanks so much for entering
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wow... loved how you used colour and grass and lol cows...
really you're wayy too impressive.
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You really liked it? ._.
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I will not go quietly into that good night.
Once again your talent impresses.
Garrison
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What a creative idea to write about!!
I loved this piece because your so harsh. Your just saying that we decay into the ground, and that is it. It really creates a bitter and affective tone for the piece...
... and I really liked the ending, of course
Well done. Thanks for the entry.
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dude, i hate you
you kill me, you are so good, hahaha
i love this background too, amazing pic, loving the green-ness
good luck (like you need it)
Stephanie ♥
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oh pssssssshhhh ma'am, he asked for emotion, and I gave him a dead person.
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an amazing dead person! hell love this, im a gonner, and i have like 3/4ths of the enteris. haha, ill laugh so hard if i win nothing
enter again
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But I'm all poem outed.
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but but...but...i wrote like 11..*sniffels* enter once more, you are amazing. haha, you made me write about toliet paper once, now you have to
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I'll think about it. Maybe in an hour or two.
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yay you make me happy. haha
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