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Tick Tock...Boom!

The person you
love the most
hurts every day

Nothing you can
say or do
will be helpful

When he is
hurting you feel
sad and cry

Tick tock tick
goes that clock;
exploding is closer

Being unable to
help him or
be with him

A ticking time
bomb is what
had sadly happened

The time it
will go off
still remaining unknown

Tick tock tick
goes that clock;
will explode eventually

Anything that could
be done to
fix it can't

Tears that fall
are just pains
that burst through

Tick tock tick
goes that clock
now he's gone

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  • rainbows. gold member
    July 7

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    "it is the worst feeling when you cannot help the one you love and oh how you wish to take away their pain but it seems that it is all too late...." I agree. Very nice piece. Thank-you very much for entering it into my contest.


  • jayyniecakes.
    February 15
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    awww.... sadd sadd!

    best of luck in my contest!

    :]


  • starving4perfection
    February 5

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    wow i liked this alot! i liked how you repeated 'tick tock'
    "Tick tock tick
    goes that clock
    now he's gone"
    sad little ending
    thanks for your entry and good luck in my contest!


  • Violent Glass
    February 1

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    this i liked, it shows such a helplessness
    i'm afraid a good friend of mine is about to explode
    and theres is nothing i can do about it
    i really liked this
    thanz for entering!


  • LunaSilverStars
    January 29

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    it is the worst feeling when you cannot help the one you love and oh how you wish to take away their pain but it seems that it is all too late....


  • Ryan79
    January 21

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    Good poem. It's very sad. I can tell that you really liked him. I hope that you are ok now. You deserve to be happy.

  • unraveled
    January 19

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    something a lot of people can relate to... it is a common feeling. when we love someone, we want them to be happy.

    thank you for your entry.
    -cassidy

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