To Mommy:
Just barely a baby
One cell split in two
You don't know me just yet
But I sure do love you.
I feel something cold
Slide smooth 'cross your belly.
A picture of me
Read through skin and jelly.
I was told I was made
In consumation of love.
I was picked just for you
A gift from above.
Can't wait for my trophies
From ballet or baseball
Just for you, Mommy,
I'll give life my all.
I know that you'll love me
Like Einstein reborn.
Little though did I know
From your womb I'd be torn.
Little by little
Baby pieces of me
Ripped in shreds from your body.
Hurts though I'm too small to bleed.
I guess Mom, you don't love me.
I did all that I could.
Mom, why don't you want me?
I must have misunderstood.
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To Baby:
Sweet baby of mine,
Just cells with a soul
I'm not ready for you.
I can't make your life whole.
Don't think I don't love you.
I want for you just the best
For my sweet little baby
Love tears through my chest.
Theres no single thing
That you have done wrong.
I'm not ready for you yet.
I'm just not that strong.
Sweet baby of mine
I want you to know
It's because that I love you
That I have to let go.
I don't want you think
I didn't love you at all
It's just not the right time
For you, babydoll.
I want you to know
I want you next time.
Someday I'll be ready,
And you will be mine.
With situations too tough
I did what I could.
Please know sweet baby
I'm just your mommy, misunderstood.
Author notes
Abortion
AlittleWrong
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I have my opinons on this subject but I won't voice them here that is not what I'm here to do. This poem was very well writen, the flow was smooth and it was an easy read. It was also quite emotion in a way. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Very touching.
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I have my own ideas on the abortion issue so I really don't want to comment on this write as to the subject matter. I will say the rhyme and flow are good ... thank you for entering
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This really struck home because my youngest granddaughter is pregnant and last night the father called to dump her and tell her he's not ready to be a father and it's just stressing him out.
Then today she gets a valentine from the weasel prick bastard.
It was sent before the phone call. -
this is pretty amazing
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For whoever this poem may be true *hugs*, every story has a reason. A very well written piece.
Sheila
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This is so true for so many people, we want the best for our children,sometimes we can't always provide it. Best to you in the contest
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great job
this is a very good piece. I like how it started with child, ended with mommy. It is really sad though, especially in child perspective. I like how each line in "to mommy" is responded by the corresponding line in "to baby"
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Positive: great way loved the idea of two diffrent perspectives you showed that well i also love how you put the rhyming together eg. I feel something cold
Slide smooth 'cross your belly.
A picture of me
Read through skin and jelly.
Negatives: for me this painted a picture but not with words it wasnt told throught metaphores or simlilies it was very once upon a time
thanks for entering -
excellent
very sad but very well written. i wish it never had to be that way.
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I've been there. This is heartbreaking to me... at first I was upset because I was like 'great, another person trying to make me feel worse...' and then upset because your reply is so true.
Really good write. Very sad
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Aww...That was REALLY GOOD!
I was so happy at first and then I was like almost in tears!
I really like the flow of words and the rhyme scheme you used. It was really a brilliant piece!
Thanks for the great read!
Good luck in your contest!
<3 Abi
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