Alice sits alone on the sand
within the heart of her Wonderland
A land of ice, where creatures abound
and all the nonsense is profound
Alice gazes across the sea
how far the real world seems to be
The sun sinks in a flash of light
Alice is too far gone to fight
Alice's land was her creation
to escape her imagination
She set it free and let it run
in hopes her troubles would be done
Alice was left alone by the shore
her memories of family are no more
Her mind will not let her be
it trapped her far beyond the sea
Alice is the queen of her world
dreams from her past life unfurled
She now wishes for an end to her pain
and a life that is excessively plain
Alice sits alone on the sand
trapped in the depths of her Wonderland
Author notes
This is inspired by the combination of the two pictures: the fantasy of the first and the loneliness of the second.
http://i287.photobucket.com/albums/ll149/glittergn/fantasy/fantasy012.gif
http://www.loreleiweb.com/28/fant/00.jpg
A-Alice in Wonderland
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Comments
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A beautiful poem, with perfect rhyme and rhythm. It was a true pleasure to read this, thank you for sharing it with us all.
Nela
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wonderful imagination there grabbing me in and the ryhme is very good :-)
this is a great take on the prompt welldone on your shiney there hun x
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Nice write
Don't know what you could do to make it any better than it is.
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Nice rhyme and I really like the soft presentation. Some shades of green are my favorites so I really like the background and the fact that it is text friendly. Thank you for enering
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Messed up...reminds me a little of a nightmare I had a few days ago, shouldn't have watched that spoilsbury toast boy it creeped me out just like salad fingers jeez.
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This was beautiful! Great flow and rhyme! I also love that you combined the two pictures together! You did a superb job thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest!
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during the whole poem i was trying to figure out what this sounds like to me...but i just can't
it's 100% unique and i love it. goodluck, and keep writing! ^.^
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great poem, cool background too... the message is very relatable (hope I spelled that right).
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