A darkened pit we lovers sit
Always intertwined
In memories lost
Broken dreams in the other we can not find
Each of us accusing
Each of us rebel
Until we drawl each-other downward
Into this never ending Hell
Yet your touch is heaven
Your kisses healing rain
But the pain caused by others
Drown any hope we gain
So lets erase the memories
One struggle at a time
Until the only thing that binds us
Is your hand in mine
Author notes
To my one love David Harrington
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But the pain caused by others drown any hope we gain----Perfect!!!
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Very nice. your emotion in this is very profound and very good. I really liked how this poem flows so well with the rhyme and none of the emotion is interupted by the flow or your rhyme scheme. Thanks for this entry and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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I absoluly love this. A wonderful wonderful flawless write that flows so smoothly.
Thank you for entering!
Laura. -
Damn this was good. I could connect to it so well. It reminded me of my boyfriend and I. I loved every line, I can't even pick a favorite stanza. Excellent write hun.
<3Kate -
i like this
it sweet
and so loving great job
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