Muddy eyes;
a mossy sundress
and the scent of
henna on Lorena's palms,
drove him away, forevermore.
Author notes
Prompt 1:
Owen: I hate the countryside. It's dirty, it's unhygienic. And what is that smell?
Gwen: That would be grass.
Owen: It's disgusting.
17 words
30 minutes.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie by Merry Christmas.
520 points, ended January 18, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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Excellent
Wonderful creation. So very well done. Congrats on the bronze.
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congrats on the bronze hon, 17 words can tell a lot about people.. well done...
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Beautiful, raw, tactile.
You write SO well, Poetess. Congratulations on this Beautiful Bronzie.
Love
Myra
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this is so good it instantly brought a smile to my face even before i read the authors notes! Great write and awesome imagery!! Jenn
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this is sooooo goood !!~!!!
this is great i love the first lines they enchanted me thanks for the write
xox kt
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God you really can write anything! I really liked this one, you said so much in just 17 words! You are bursting with talent my dear!
Congrats on the bronze. 
Take care
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oh that's good storytelling (:
congratulations on the bronze
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aw wow a brillant take on the promt as always congratulations on your shinymaralisa
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Ylova, beautiful write as always from you dear, this was a great poem in such few words as well! congrats on the bronze!
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Oh I like the storytelling aspect in this one, it just gies you a scene to imagine in your head C
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Hehe, funny, cos Gwen has brown eyes, even if you didn't use Gwen in this
Okay, on a more serious not, this does not suck! Makes sense, has description which sparks imagery, is good. You hear me? Goooood.
Thanks for entering.
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