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Forever

Thunder erupts,
Cracking the glass of death
from beneath my feet.
devastation lies around me
The rubble turn to dust
and the smell of death surrounds my life's grave
but in time I'll be forgiven
the only one thing that i've truely lost is you...
the only two eyes beautiful enough
to melt my heart are the two
I'll never see again
...never
the red clouds are back again
condensating as the blood
flies to the top of my world
battered and scared my soul wishes and hopes
but just gets a kick in the teeth for looking up too high
I can't feel much anymore
I feel like I'm in a pit with an open door
but like the resistence of a water current
I just can't get through
But I can see the happiness on the other side
the undeniable ecstasy of forgiveness and rememberance
but the current holds me back...
I'm stuck
and this time I refuse to breathe.

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A poetic rant my friendss...

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  • Violent Glass
    January 18
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    i liked tgis alot
    you're stuck in a place you dont want to be
    this is great
    good write