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Syntax


I am not a presumption of innocents,

nor a prescience the fabulous wear. 

 

Merely flesh, I am sheddings of spirit, flightless,

not predictions that feasts unswilled will grow supple wings.

 

 

I do not understand my diamonds,

nor the cyclamen given me by curvy lovers who also mimic butterflies,

as though such beautiful things could push my blood 

through the wounds lovers carry

 

like eyes.

 

 

I am a presumption of innocence, I do not understand why you love me.

I only hear your fingers contemplate my body.

 

Merely flesh, I am dross of flight,

I shall stay and listen to your elegant syntax.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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lst line .. 'innocents' ... plural noun ... don't go there

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  • Night Hope gold member
    June 19

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    In this piece, you merge the hauntingly beautiful images of gemstones with butterflies, among other profound metaphors. Most apropos, considering how brilliantly they both shine. I see our mutual friend has left her mark on this one, too. She's right; this is exquisite writing, Danny.




  • BeThouMyVision
    January 18
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    Heh I repeated myself I just wasn't sure at the end but I was pretty positive that's what I was reading.
    Heh yeah you did get to that poem before I linked it.

  • BeThouMyVision
    January 18

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    I love how you describe people, beautiful in there state and mind. As if they don't have to say anything but just use touch and eye contact. How you said that you can't describe your diamonds. Love. love love.

    Through the wounds lovers carry- O how that is so true.

    "I am a presumption of innocence, I do not understand why you love me.

    I only hear your fingers contemplate my body."

    As that as if feeling love through ones touch and use of body language?