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Glass Tears

The rain was a result
of overloaded clouds
or perhaps,
the moon ascending
the way the moon
effects the tides.
Just the same,
when it splattered on
the page and the ink ran,
it might have mirrored
her mood, and the deep
blue of her eyes in the
looking glass before
it shattered on the tiles.
Nonsense, the rain
was a result of her mood,
and the ink ran because
she couldn't.




Author notes

Word bank : rain, moon, cloud, glass, tiles, ink, splatter

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  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    February 20

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    "Nonsense, the rain
    was a result of her mood,
    and the ink ran because
    she couldn't."

    i have to agree with the others down there, what a superb line to finish with

    Thank you for your entry,
    I wish you the best of luck!
    Claire x


  • LovelyTraces
    February 10

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    This was beautiful. My fav. part:

    Aw, hell. The whole thing's my favorite part!

    You did a great job, and it was definitely a challenge that you were up to! Good luck in the contest!

  • Aries gold member
    February 8

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    Yes Magnificent Aries

    Daire has made a succinct terrific note of your
    great poem.I can only say I totally agree with all
    he has written


  • Daire
    January 25

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    This is a magnificent word bank poem. Very imaginative and has some of the best closing lines I've ever read: "Nonsense, the rain/was a result of her mood,/and the ink ran because/she couldn't." Clever and evocative.


  • MysticalRayne
    January 25

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    I really enjoyed the way you put this together - a wonderfully written piece with few words - thank you for sharing


  • trekkergirl
    January 25

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    word banks are so very hard to write I think because you have to use the words that they give you and sometimes the words they give you just don't go together all that well.

    Thanks for sharing this with us.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    January 21

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    Great work with this word bank!
    I love your thoughts here.
    Thanks for sharing it with me!




    Jeremy0826


  • Beret55 silver member
    January 20
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    Very good... I like it..


  • aestival
    January 19

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    I was reading this and thinking, "oh, this is pretty good" and then I got to the last line and – whoa. That was amazing. I loved this. So much. I'm trying to think of something else to add, something constructive, but... no. that was just freaking the best poem I've read on AP in a long while.


  • maralisa silver member
    January 18
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    aw a wonderful use of the word bank good luck in the contestmaralisa

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