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My Last Breath (It's All My Fault)

No explanations, no goodbye
I stand here wondering why.
It's hard to go through this alone
It's worse to know you aren't on your own.

I sit here reminiscing about the past
"It's not your fault," they tell me
But you were gone way too fast
I chased you away from me.

I'm screaming the apologies at you
I'd do anything to have you back
It's all my fault, if only you knew
What I'd do to get us back on track.

I would give you the whole world if I could
I'd swim the entire ocean for you.
It would be better if you understood,
You'd know everything I'd do.

Hear me out love, listen well
If I were on my death bed
You'd be my last thought, my last word.
Without you, I'd wish to be dead.

Nothing is the same now
No one or nothing can replace
I'm still alone standing here asking myself how,
I could ever let the only thing I love be misplaced.

I lay here for hours, watch time pass me by
I think about what was ours, and i still ask myself why.
I cry these tears, yearning for you
It's the only thing that I can do.

If only you could see the potential we hold
You'd understand why I can't let go.
All of my pain and sorrow is beginning to unfold
And I'm not ashamed to let everything show.

Because of you, I'm becoming unstable
But I'd apologize for every flaw that is in me.
With my last gasp of breath I know I'd still be unable
To get you to still be in love with me.




Author notes

1 Taking back sunday-You are so last summer
"well the truth is that you could slit my throat and with my one last gasping breath I'd apologise for bleedig on you'r shirt"


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  • Heroesrox
    September 6

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    You have an awesome piece here. I really like the wording and format that you have. Thank you so very much for sharing this one with me and everyone else here. Very good work. Best wishes to you and keep penning!


  • Miss Macabre silver member
    July 20

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    Pain, yes. More of a teenager's relationship related pain then the kind of pain I was looking for, but a good poem all the same. Could use some work, thanks for entering and good luck.


  • XXxFAKExXx
    July 12
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    beautiful write !


  • Ami
    June 27

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    Wow this is awesome great with the prompt I'm happy I added you as a favorite I love all your writes ^_^
    and your contests too

    -♥Amy♥


  • songstress80
    June 13

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    such a powerful and emotional write...it hurts to love someone and lose them...this poem has all the pain and torment...excellent work!


  • Antebellum
    June 4

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    "Because of you, I'm becoming unstable
    But I'd apologize for every flaw that is in me.
    With my last gasp of breath I know I'd still be unable
    To get you to still be in love with me.
    "


    Amazing ending.
    [I love that song ]

  • lollipopgal
    May 26

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    this is a very well written poem good job!!
    It really captured the true meaning of love


  • Horcrux.Breathing
    January 18

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    A most wonderfull interpretation

    This is wounderfully written i can feel the emotions in this poem its so sad I love it its really captured my heart

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