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while on a walk with kelsea

 






perhaps the moon is an antique glass ornament,
hung from a worn metal bracket

and inside the bracket is a chip which
only the person who handles the bulb knows about


the moon is fragile i share, staring

the shorter length of kelsea's arms contrasted with my own,
inside the shadow of a late walk

my thoughts are long

and full of midnight

i was lost for a time, i continue, explaining my absence
until one day i warmed like milk and lost the soupy stare of death


my shadow reaches for her hand, brushes the air inside the black

some day i want to
emerge white, sparkle inside a poem




 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • pocket pixie
    May 8, 2009

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    there is a sadness to this
    the sadness that seems to come with .. understanding history, saying it out loud, when you know there was a point when you didn't, when it hurt too much to look at it.

    what I find hopeful is that you shared it with Kelsea, let her see it, maybe she will look quicker than you did.

    does that make sense?


  • truembrace silver member
    January 30, 2009

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    there is something (that I imagine) in those walks, as a mother, that makes one feel so whole/complete - regardless of the conversation at the time. those moments are the gifts that one takes as the children grow and share their own philosophy. amazing how some days can be such a gift.

    it's a wonderful poem, Mary. thanks so much for sharing such moments with us - the best of them and those that are not so easily coped with... All of them come through in amazing poetry here.

    Kim


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    January 25, 2009
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    wow...awesome write!
    brought back an old memory for me that I may just write something about so I won't forget again.
    so thanx for that.

    I have to say the metaphors in this piece are just brilliant and I am drawn to the raw honesty of your words.

    I don't know why your not on my fav list, but I'll have to fix that



  • voices
    January 20, 2009

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    i have found white to be over rated yet in the eyes of others and even in our own perception it can seem so clean. i have hidden there, among the label of wamsutta and 400 thread count.
    you sparkkle child yes you do. And if now, of course you will then.
    those who have shall get, those who have not shall loose. you have much, thanks for sharing.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    January 19, 2009

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    The opening line of this poem is stunning! I really loved the way that it set up the poem with a feeling of childlike curiosity the feeling of this poem emerges in strength and the poetry that you use to express it left me (almost) speechless!



    Polly


  • obatala
    January 19, 2009
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    Amazing.
    I don't know any other way to say it.

  • A Prophet of 3 gold member
    January 19, 2009
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    put some Brandy in that slush ... makes a great after-meal drink


  • Ryno gold member
    January 19, 2009

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    Your imagery and emotion makes me want to shout for joy, cry out, run around in circles, beat my head off the wall, or just sleep and never stop thinking about it, all at the same time....


  • IronIcecream
    January 19, 2009
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    slush is good for ya


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 19, 2009
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    wonderfully visual and strong poetry!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Peteskid gold member
    January 18, 2009

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    wonderful sense of reaching and searching here...a very strong idea of a path...remarkable...PK


  • Jersene gold member
    January 18, 2009
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    this has turned out wonderfully Mary


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    January 18, 2009

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    You sparkle inside all your poems Mary Cat.
    Did you know that a full moon is no bigger than a dime held at arms length.
    What power for something that size to wield, huh?


  • Crowheart
    January 18, 2009

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    MC, your words make me woozy
    like this one for instance girl,
    friend its an ace in the hole
    yes a real doozy

    or...
    ore...

    shadowed thoughts upon a moonlit walk

    two sided poem on a graveled burm

    following footprints thru a foramen

    to phantoms of empyrean loss


  • Rowan gold member
    January 18, 2009

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    There's just something about the moon, isn't there? It draws out the lovers, the poets, and the philospers
    in droves. When ever I read your work, I find it so easy to slip into your footsteps as you walk. Beautiful work, and you do shine. so there.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    January 18, 2009

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    sounds like conversations me and beth have, a mother and daughter on their own travels meeting in a moment, a shadow of time .... a shared beam of light

    you bring us light, like a beautiful bauble

    keep on twinkling


  • geckogirl
    January 18, 2009
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    love the slush, great ending...


  • bobanonymous gold member
    January 18, 2009
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    Some very nice images


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    January 18, 2009

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    i love the little subtle changes you did from the last time i saw this...
    you know my deepest thoughts already
    i am still amazed that even another time reading this i find something new... a simple change of the comma before staring- perfect. i was lost for a time.... and arent we all in one time or another- i loved the human acceptance of this line


  • tara wilson gold member
    January 17, 2009

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    wonderful poetry, Mary, it is always such a pleasure to read you


  • notorious gold member
    January 17, 2009
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    Damn

    just put " " marks on all the comments below for mine.


  • machiavel
    January 17, 2009
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    this is beyond excellent. i wish i could say something critical, but i'm floored


  • cup-a-joe silver member
    January 17, 2009

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    I am fixing to go for a walk..
    Wow what imagery.
    I could walk around the globe and not write such perfection.
    Joe


  • nutmegg
    January 17, 2009
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    mary, this is wonderful...


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    January 17, 2009
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    very strong poetry...

    a stunning clarity of voice and vision

    al


  • Cannonsfire
    January 17, 2009

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    That ending...wow...and to your kelsea I am sure you do shine always and much brighter than what is in the sky C


  • DogFish silver member
    January 17, 2009

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    "some day i want to
    emerge white, sparkle inside a poem...!

    Someone sparkles inside of this one!



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