god doesn't want me for a sunbeam....
god doesn't want me at all
for I've danced in the darkness for way to long
injected the devil into my veins
and he's returned to cash in my sins
so no god doesn't want me for a sunbeam
but the devil can't wait to see me in hell...
A contest entry
- Addictions by LOVELYmurder.
600 points, ended March 24, 41 entries
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God doesn't abandon His children, no matter how engulfed in darkness they are. Those are satans lies trying to make you stray from God. God has worked wonders in my life and I have been where you are right now, He saved me from that. God forgives your sins, Jesus died on the cross for our sins so we can be forgiven. I hope that this is just a write and not how you truely feel.
I like your descriptions in this piece. It's true, drugs are from the devil. I like how short it is, it adds to the effect of the poem. It's a very haunting write and pretty deep. Good job and good luck in the contest. -
being in recovery, i can tell you that God DOES want you. He wants each and every one of us. i truly hope that this is simply a write and not how you feel. thank you for sharing this with me today. i wish you well in this contest that we both have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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oh my godness this is simply i write of how i first felt when i got clean! i just got my 8 month coin and am happily sober!!
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this is such an interesting piece... the last line really makes it very suprising.
nice write :]
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great
i love, very deep. great. thats all i can say. awesome.
peace and love,
jake
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wow. deep.
i love it! xx
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i know this is true with me.
and i love the first line, nirvana coved a song with the lyric.
dancing in darkness is a wonderful feeling.
and i loved this one.
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This was so sad but hauntingly dark. I've felt this way many times before. I like the repitition, it feels like a mini song or something. Great job
Jeanette*~
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