on a cold dewy night
you wrap your self in your coat
and hug yourself tighter
there's a soft winter breeze blowing
your hair is moving calmly
you smell peaches, oranges, and granny smith apples
you look up and see the stars shining bright over head
you've never seen nothin as beautiful as this
there's the north star
its so easy to see
Galileo, and Taurus, and Sagittarius too
you take another deep breath
hoping to engulf the sweet scent once again
only to be mesmerized by the sudden change
it's sweet, but not fruity
it's weird, but not bad
you look around trying to find this enticing scent
only to come across a pasture
with horses neighing and grazing
and keeping to themselves
you see something moving in the near distance
you stay quiet
then you see what it is
a man standing proud and tall
muscular and lean
working hard
whats is country
its happiness
and inner piece
its serenity
and beauty
its a home away from home
and a place where part of my heart will always be
A contest entry
- Country is... by davidwright.
600 points, ended January 18, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please give me as much advice as possible this is for governors school
Comments
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Well done! I love the Imagery and emotion used here. I will be sure to read more of your work when I find the time.
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i love this poem the way use your diction and imagery is amazing!
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A very lovely entry and a nice read. It could use some periods to end the sentences and capital letters when the next one begins. Thanks for the entry and happy trails.
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love it....all country all the way lol but you might wont to refrase some of the words so that they flow more instead of being alittle choppy....but other than that you have a really great sense of words and power.i feel as if im really there, the place that your decsibing!!!
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