Can't hold on much longer
I'm so weak, these memories stronger
I might just be losing my mind
memories left thier images behind
Horror movie replaying in my head
His voice in my ears, shameful things he'd said
Have to stab myself or cut
cuz I'm tearing at the seams
all I hear is him
over all my pointless screams
choking on air
can hardly breathe
flashbacks in my head
will never leave!
Leave me alone...
I trip, and fall
knees to my chest
I curl in a ball
gonna die in this empty room
in the dark
all that has happened leaves
and invisible, painful mark
breaking out in sweats
my stomach starts to twirl...
head is throbbing- feeling sick
such a broken girl...
~Madison~
A contest entry
- A Challenging Frenzy of Emotion by Jade Rain.
700 points, ended June 25, 2009, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hi Sweetheart
This such an incredibly powerfully emotional write. I can feel your pain, I can hear your cries and I am listening.
I hope and pray that you are getting stronger and that you are becoming whole. I am here for you always.
Love, hugs, blessings and peace.
Marilyn
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=)
Thanks so much for your kind words on this piece. I wrote this a while back, and I don't want you to feel obligated to read and comment mine, because its so much easier for me to just read yours because your a MUCH better poet then me. Thanks again for taking the time to read this.
I hope all is well with you!
~Madison~
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First of all: Wow. You literally grabbed my hand and transferred your experiences to my mind without being so very detailed. I like that. It's a good thing.
An interesting observation: your sentences were somewhat short and choppy, yet your words flowed together perfectly, naturally. That takes talent.
"invisible, painful mark"
Your imagery is stunning, especially so in this phrase.
One last remark: You made your piece so easy to relate to. This left me stunned and wanted to read it over again and again. Great job. -
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Thank you!
Wow! thank you, that really means alot. Yes, sometimes my poems get short and choppy when im upset and just want to get to the 'meat' of the emotion. I'm always nervous entering a contest with a very personal piece, but i am grateful for your acknoledgement and honesty. I am glad for a moment i could walk you through and transfer my sick reality to you're mind.
Thank you again.
~Madison~
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Powerful
You have so much passion in your words. its hard to contain all the emotion flowing through the lines. You must have had a lot going through your head at the time. I know what its like to go though a breakdown.
Powerful words
Skippy
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