Night to day.
Day to night.
Subtle changes over time.
Sunrise.
Moon set.
Warm to cold, quickly we forget.
Memories set when the moon shines in the brilliance of the darkened sky.
Cold to Cold.
Colors, no more, now colors turn to shade.
Warm glistening memories hidden by cool expectations frozen in the peak of day.
The beauty of white tempts the senses, but the desire of reds, in mind, sit a stray.
Memories set when the moon shines in the brilliance of the darkened sky.
Night to day.
Day to night.
Subtle changes over time.
Sunset
Moonrise
Out of winters chill spring has arrived.
A contest entry
- Nature Lovers by StormyDawn.
1000 points, ended March 18, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Really very lovely
liked it alot
but put it in a structure na
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Your use of opposites is great; warm and cold, day and night, rise and set. Let us all do as you say and not forget the events that the cycles of change bring us. I would suggest that you put a space after every 3 lines (as you started to do in the beginning), it might help the poem visually.
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Thanks I decided that you were correct. It is visually more appealing. THANKS
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Really nice, there is something about this poem which makes you feel cool. I would replace the word 'doth' though, it's archaic, and doesn't flow, and makes the poem feel as if it was written a hundred years ago instead of now.. and this is you talking, a 21st century person with lovely things to say... just 'shines'... shines is a beautiful word...
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Thank you I decided to take your suggestion. I completely agree with you. I had written it and forgotten about it and you guys have made me look at it a re live what I was feeling when I wrote it.
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I found the flow to be well penned and I love emotion... and the great imagery...
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Beautiful
I liked this a lot. I liked how you wrote about the changing from winter to spring. Best of luck and thanks for entering!
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