You seem to me an oceanic octavarium
As I gaze at your brilliant, bejeweled surface
It strikes me as wondrous, awe-inspiring
An affirmation of God, of love, of the glory in our pitiable circumstance
Your sight satiates my being with a warmth, a hope, and a light
Although the effect be marked, massive,
I can never move you as you have moved me
There wilt thou tarry, shining and shuffling in place
the tears I pour to bolster you will never be perceived
Yet your beauty, though immovable, unattainable, is my life-blood
I am yet a captain, steering my lonely vessel atop your pristine plane
And I will cherish, ever so fervently, each and every speck of foam
That mists up to meet my parched, arid flesh
And each endeavor out upon the main ends at the beginning
Back on the somnambulant shore, sullen, somber; scorched sails smolder
And I'm gazing at the deep, longing for its embrace to saturate my lungs
You seem to me a planetary paradox
An infinite, eternal expanse of terror and myst'ry and grace
You comprise vast, comely complexity
With superlative celestial symmetry
These trillion leagues removed, I could pour over your every detail for decades
Striving tirelessly to find a meaning, a mission; a cause and an effect
Yet though your sight sets my soul to swells of superfluous sweetness
Disparity of distance, size, heart, mind, and matter
Keeps me chained here, suffering on this sick'ning, sublunary sphere
And with each noxious night, I'll find your immensity impossible to ignore
And even unto my death bed, I'll peer through paltry lenses
Mourning our proximity, pining to procure a travesty of your pulchritude
Until my reddened eyes roll, and relief shows its maternal figure
In the form of a fissure in the fabric of space, the narrowest of gates
And it leads me to a parallel plane, an existence
Where I'll never have to think or feel or hope or dream again
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Ab-so-fuckin-lutely Amazing!
This is an amazing poem. I'm surprised that no one has even commented on it, seeing as it has been here so long.
It's interesting to look back now, to know what I know now, and to read this. I truly can feel your pain when I read this to the point where I started feeling like I, myself, was going to cry. My terminology for poetry and the like has become rusty over the months, so I truly do not know what category to let this fall under; but it does not matter what label you apply to it - it is a great piece of poetry and burns into one's soul when you read over each line. If made some minor mistake, I didn't catch it. This is just another superior example of the quality of your writing.
I hope that one day you pursue writing professionally, you have both the skill and the voice to make an excellent author.
Truly, I wish I could personally help in this situation, though you have told me that you are making progress in getting over her, and I wish that I could make assurances that you could sway her one way or another. But both you and I know that THAT is no certainty, and I doubt anything I could do would really help. I DO think you have more of a chance than someone else I know that has very similar feelings for her, but I also think that you can find someone else without such complications.
Despite these thoughts, I need to ask - what is it about her that makes her so desirable?
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