I touched the dark purple flower
Luscious in all it's full, round petals
And long, green, fuzzy-looking stem
I touched it's petals softly, velvet feel
My finger traced it back and forth,fuzz
I felt it's fuzzy padding fragile but thick
Softer than the best made cotton shirt
It's shape a roundish feel with satin edge
I slowly grazed my finger down the stem
Fuzzy, but not soft, more prickly I'd say
Gently, I lifted it to my nose, the smell
was beautiful a light airy kind of scent
Sweet,richly fragrant at the same time.
Filling me with serenity and lingering
Thoughts of when I was a child,playing
In a far off field of wild plants roaming
As I thought of the days of hide and seek
Within the tall grass and pretty flowers.
I looked at the flower in my shaded hand
This flower was the most perfect flower.
Out of all in my giant garden, purple
Purple waves of perfection on every
Single petal.Truly a sight to behold!
A contest entry
- Beautiful to the Touch by J Kard.
750 points, ended February 12, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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This is filled with such vivid imagery. I could feel what you felt as I imagined my finger tracing the fuzzy, prickly stem ... nice job!
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THANK YOU SO MUCH! I appreciate all of your support!
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The first stanza would make a good opening for a romance novel...nice description! I liked how you lead us to its last line...and the sensory devices tickle the mind. I read it a few times...relaxing
"Filling me with serenity and lingering" is my favourite line...probably because of the flow and its introduction to a scene I can only dream of...
The third stanza gives us the satisfaction of admiring the magnified beauty in a small and simple thing.
It's wonderful how your writing always seems so positive and serene whatever the subject. There is sadness...but only as a backdrop against which we can see ourselves more clearly, and to identify the wonders that make life worth living.
Really nice piece.
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it would make a good opening for a romance novel wouldn't it? XD
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So sweet and touching here, you're a flower itself, this is your reflection
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aww thanks!
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wow....
this is soo beautiful!! I love it! very nice job!!!
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Thank you!
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