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2nd Discussion--tat tvam asi

“Life, like a dome of many colored glass
stains the white radiance of Eternity”
---Shelly









Small twigs
like fearsome beasts
peek above the water rocking--

Beyond, the fog is a white wall,
hiding the island of Avalon,

the mountain where Dioce nestles
the long valley of Byzantium,

and more besides,

I bathe in cold water
listening for the rustle of your silks,
your hot breath

the coracle rides on gentle waves,
my pole is a twisted vine
the white wall
towers into the sky;

we may follow the shore,
knowing that it lies,
or pierce the wall
and leave such concerns behind--

all that was
fading in the wake of our small home.

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  • cvillelisa
    January 20

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    "Thou art that" "That thou art" "You are that"

    reading the Upanishads?

    a bit of investigation for future readers who many happen to come across this:

    The meaning of this saying is that the Self - in its original, pure, primordial state - wholly or partially identifiable or identical with the Ultimate Reality that is the ground and origin of all phenomena. The knowledge that this is so characterises the experience of liberation or salvation that accompanies the Unio Mystica.

    'Thou' stands for the inherent substratum in each one of us without which our very existence is out of question. Certainly it is not the body, mind, the senses, or anything that we call ours. It is the innermost Self, stripped of all egoic tendencies. It is Ātman.


    The entity indicated by the word 'That' according to the notation used in the Vedas, is Brahman, the transcendent Reality which is beyond everything that is finite, everything that is conceived or thought about. You cannot give a full analogy to it and that is why the Vedas say words cannot describe it. It cannot even be imagined because when there is nothing else other than Brahman it has to be beyond space and time. We can imagine space without earth,water, fire and air. But it is next to impossible to imagine something outside space. Space is the most subtle of the five elemental fundamentals. As we proceed from the grossest to the subtle, that is, from earth to water, to fire, to air, and to space the negation of each grosser matter is possible to be imagined within the framework of the more subtle one. But once we reach the fifth one, namely space or Ākāsha, the negation of that and the conception of something beyond, where even the space is merged into something more subtle, is not for the finite mind. The Vedas therefore declare the existence of this entity and call it 'sat' (existence), also known as Brahman.


    from wiki.


    yes. i happen to be aware of a place that, for me, pierces the pierces the wall to leave all concerns behind..takes me to that place of Unio Mystica


    nice Shelly quote too. i might read this as a love poem of sorts
    but i'm prone to those types of interpretations. I like it. Lots. Can't wait to read them all together, should you ever really finish them.

    Lisa



    • IronIcecream
      January 21
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      you know that the term righteous might rather go for people honest to their own honesty in using their right brain hemisphere rather than being faithful to a set of rules or less/misunderstood notion of material self?


  • Cannonsfire
    January 17

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    I can see if we walk adjacent to the problems we never overcome them, to pierce the wall and define what the problem is, we clear it or at least attempt too. Maybe as beings we just become miserly in wanting to always be right rather than accepting things that go wrong can be fixed. Very beautiful and clear as always C

  • IronIcecream
    January 17

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    thinking in absolutes
    always gives the impression of paradox
    when there is only dissonance
    a third tone giving logic a non linear dimension
    that is choice
    because only reason never was or is
    will