Why did you have to captivate me so
In the steady rhythm of your enticing gaze?
Why did you hold me so close and tight
Sprinkling me with such heartfelt praise?
Why were you the only one there
When I was caught in seas of confusion?
Why are your words chosen so rightly
Brewing intoxicating solutions?
Why did you steal my longing soul
And why does your presence heal my heart?
Why, with every part of my being,
Did I love you right from the start?
Why do you seem to care for me so
Teaching me, guiding me through life?
But most of all, why was I not chosen
Instead of your very lucky wife?
Author notes
This is only partly based on a personal experience. Most people have experienced unrequited love. Except in my case the guy wasn't married... it was just forbidden.
A contest entry
- Forbidden Love.... by Mrs D.
700 points, ended January 26, 2009, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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It's admirable that you're not bitter about it. Unrequited love sucks, but I'm glad it's making you stronger. This piece isn't caked up like most sob-sob poems, and sends a strong sense of confusion that I find simple and to the point, and that compliments the expressed emotions. Well done.
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sweet ....
really good poem ....right along the lines of what im a looking for...lovely description of someone taking over and captivating your entire world !! great metaphors...
"Why do you seem to care for me so
Teaching me, guiding me through life?
But most of all, why was I not chosen
Instead of your very lucky wife?"
i love this stanza...
'i can relate to it"...thanks fo entering ...best of luck
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Oh that dreaded "why"!! It can be the worst, saddest question ever, with never an answer. You want it so badly to make sense...it's so frustrating!
This is indeed SO sad, I can relate to the emotions, which you capture so extremely well!
Hope everything is well!!
♥
Michele
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For some reason seeing your comment cheered me up a bit. I guess I just miss talking with you. hope we get in contact soon. I'm in Colorado now, by the way, looking for a job. ♥
Take care.
~Sharon
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very sincere and heartfelt words here, i think many will get these feelings..good use of simple open words to carry some complicated ideas...PK
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amazing write!
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Oh great poem, Hon.. Been there, done that.. Teachers, doctors, cops, how men in positions of authority can sweep the rug from under one's feet.. Thanks so much for a wonderful read..
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