i.
i remembered you wonderful. but where we stood, i now realize, we stood fated to fall. fall like i fell in the beginning, fast and hard, as if my cable had snapped. i never saw the scissors in your back pocket.
ii.
the warm summer breeze reminded me of the times i used to lay my head on your chest. the recycled air hit the top of my head and the moisture condensed. it was, in the end, the only thing about you that made me sweat.
but it's funny how your hair on my pillow doesn't remind me of anything...
iii.
it's dark in the city tonight. it's a dark that grasps my lungs and squeezes, collapses my heart in on itself, renders me useless. it lodges in my throat, deeply intertwined with memories created and supposedly left behind long ago. it smothers me and stifles me, but i know that with the sun and easier breath will come the notion that dark can't return soon enough.
Author notes
apparently, stabbing your grandfather with a soddering iron will get you 5-10.
my word was "paralyzer."
ap name: trinsa
A contest entry
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yes.
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yes.
Please wait for the other judges comment. -
This is my personal comment for the catharsis rounds.
Upon the closing of the contest, I will comment back with a 'yes' or 'no.'
That being said, I really really liked this.
I agree with Aanika, that your imagery was a bit lacking, but your emotion was beautiful.
I'll be back. =]
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this was a good poem.
it could have used a little bit more imagery,
but I really felt the emotion, and that's what this contest is about.
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That was beautiful! i loved the imargery, awesome!
Thanks for entering! -
I liked it a lot! Great poem!
Good Luck!
~Frosty -
ok heres your word
Paralyzer
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